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Posted by: Don, May 31st, 2006, 8:59pm
Devil May Cry by Guy Jackson - Action, Sci Fi, Adventure - Long ago, when Demons and Humans cohabitated on Earth together, a great stuggle broke out between the two.  One Demon Knight, Sparda, turned on his own and sent the Demons back to the Underworld.  Two thousand years later, Sparda's twin sons, born from a human mother, will need to fight the Demons once again and decide if the Humans are truly worth saving.   115 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: guyjackson (Guest), May 31st, 2006, 10:04pm; Reply: 1
Yes sir.  Another screenplay written by me.  I steered away from the Action genre for a while but I'm back.  I have a feeling many will like this, especially you action buffs out there.

And big ups to Don for posting this up with such haste.  I really appreciate it.  

Please enjoy.  
Posted by: Shelton, May 31st, 2006, 10:16pm; Reply: 2
Guy,

Is this based on the video game, or is the title just a coincidence?

I'd probably know this had I ever played the game.
Posted by: guyjackson (Guest), May 31st, 2006, 10:22pm; Reply: 3
Yes, very loosely, Mike.  I didn't want to put it in the logline because I didn't want people to be automatically turned away when they saw "based on the video game".  I'm not trying to hide it, but I don't want it to be pre-judged.  

Pretty much the only thing that is taken from the video games are some of the character names.  Other than that, it's its own story.
Posted by: James Fields, May 31st, 2006, 10:24pm; Reply: 4
This is on my to-do list along with 9 other scripts... I'll have a review before next thursday Guy!!!
Posted by: guyjackson (Guest), May 31st, 2006, 10:33pm; Reply: 5
I know exactly what you mean, James.  I have 5 myself to read.

But that's how we roll here, haha.

Thanks for adding it to your list.    
Posted by: dcooper, June 1st, 2006, 10:56am; Reply: 6
Guy,

I just finished reading your Quake script last week, which I liked, but I have to go over to make comments on. I'm currently reading your Devil May Cry script, which is based off of a video game. It seems to take some liberties from what I can tell. I don't exactly know the official storyline, but I do know Dante and Vergil are the sons on Sparda and I know that they don't like eachother very much, especially in the 3rd game which is a prequal which has them figthing eachother.

I was curious as to how much of the original story did you keep from the game, and what were the liberties taken with the script. I'm not a Devil May Cry hardcore fan, so you don't have worry about me complaining about changes.

You seem to like writing video game adaptions which I find interesting. I like to know if you are adapting more int he near future.
Posted by: Combichrist, June 1st, 2006, 11:05am; Reply: 7
I'm going to go Download this Script now, Sounds like it's going to be a great read.
Posted by: Combichrist, June 1st, 2006, 11:31am; Reply: 8
So far I have read to page 34 and Have to say this is great work. Rich characters and great descriptive terms.
Posted by: dcooper, June 1st, 2006, 12:54pm; Reply: 9
This was an entertaining read. It seems to have gotten the personality of Dante down as well. I need to read more of the video games story to see how this would compare, but it would be excellent as a CG movie ala Final Fantasy:Advent Children.

However, there were some errors that I have picked up listed below:

Pg 74 Chaos wasn’t in this scene. I think this should be Hades speaking:

CHAOS
But he failed.

Pg 92: This should read Vergil stabbing Chaos instead of Vergil stabbing Vergil

Vergil prepares to stab Vergil in the chest, ending the
fight.


Pg 96 Should be “lift his”

After finishing that line, Chaos lifts is arm and by some
unknown force, A PLATFORM MOVES TO CONNECT THE TWO VERGIL
AND CHAOS STAND ON.

That's about it. This was a very entertaining read.
Posted by: guyjackson (Guest), June 1st, 2006, 8:33pm; Reply: 10

Quoted from dcooper
Guy,

I just finished reading your Quake script last week, which I liked, but I have to go over to make comments on. I'm currently reading your Devil May Cry script, which is based off of a video game. It seems to take some liberties from what I can tell. I don't exactly know the official storyline, but I do know Dante and Vergil are the sons on Sparda and I know that they don't like eachother very much, especially in the 3rd game which is a prequal which has them figthing eachother.

I was curious as to how much of the original story did you keep from the game, and what were the liberties taken with the script. I'm not a Devil May Cry hardcore fan, so you don't have worry about me complaining about changes.

You seem to like writing video game adaptions which I find interesting. I like to know if you are adapting more int he near future.


Dcooper, you ask some very good questions and I will answer them to the best of my ability.  First off, thank you for reading my Quake screenplay and I am glad you enjoyed it.  As for my screenplay's adaptation of Devil May Cry, I didn't want an exact replica of the games because that doesn't take any talent to just recreate a game in 120 pages.  I wanted to create a little backstory to the characters because it really isn't explained alot in any of the games, even 3 being a prequel.  I wanted to get into the history of Dante and Vergil and their parents, Sparda and Eva.  So even though it is only about 5 pages, I wanted to give the family a good solid foundation that would hopefully give them a reason for being mentioned in the games.

As far as what I have used from the games, it is mostly character names and some basic plot lines.  The story is original in itself, this is not like any of the games.  It resembles the third one out of all the closest, but even that one is not an exact replica of my script.  The one thing that irked me about the games was that a bad ass character such as Vergil, was not really given a story.  He was automatically represented as a bad guy and I hated that.  So with this script I tried to give him some background story and some major plot lines.  I don't want to give too much away right now because some people are still reading probably so if you want me to explain more just let me know.

As far as writing video game adaptations, I love them.  I started with it based solely on the purpose of training.  Video games have basic storylines and have a decent enough plot to map out in a screenplay.  But I am really starting to enjoy writing them.  I'm not saying I will only write adaptations, because I love original ideas, but it is a good way to get your writing on point.  If you notice I have 2 original screenplays and two adaptations.  I like to mix it around.

Hopefully that answered some of your questions.

I also thank you for pointing out those typos for me.  I wrote this on a laptop and that's the first time I have ever wrote on one.  This screen is much smaller than my PC and I can see I missed some careless errors I made.  I will go back and fix these when I can.

Thanks for reading.
Posted by: TAnthony, June 1st, 2006, 10:07pm; Reply: 11
I like how you put your own little spin on this story. Your descriptons and characters were very good, and I really enjoyed the story. I see you like to do alot of videogame adaptions. If the others are as good as this than you really give them justice.


SPOILERS--


The Good
-I like how you included Beowulf in the story.
-I like the way you did your action sequences you left alot of it up too the readers imaagination.
-Athena's narration was pretty good.
-The swords of fire and ice was a good idea. Cool.
-The script ended very well with the Demon army chanting Dante's name.

The Bad
-Dante talks to himself too much.
-Write Int. Athena's home(flashback), and write Int. Main tower main hall(present)
-I didn't like Athena that much I wanted her too be much more wiser.
-Dante's one liners were irritating. I've played the game before and I know that he does alot of the corny one-liners. that's probably why you did it.
-Sometimes the all caps were uneccesary.
-We weren't allowed to catch our breaths in between some action sequences. It just kept on going and going and going no breathers.
-When Dante wakes up you say he has Demon hands and head. What do demon heads and hands look like?
-On page five you have try instead of dry.
-I missed it who was the voice that told Dante to realize his true powers.
-Why was Idonea not allowed to fight Dante, but allowed to fight Vergil.
-How can you drop kick another person?
-The last part of the script really started to lose steam.

I think this script could be shortened just a little bit. I'm not sure which parts should be taken out, but you coulld probably decide that. Once again the script was very good. Keep up the great writing.


Good Luck.
Posted by: TAnthony, June 1st, 2006, 11:36pm; Reply: 12
Sorry I messed something up in my reply.

-On page five you have written "Dante stabs Dante."
-And on page 24 you have written "try" instead of "dry"
Posted by: guyjackson (Guest), June 4th, 2006, 10:19pm; Reply: 13

Quoted from TAnthony
I like how you put your own little spin on this story. Your descriptons and characters were very good, and I really enjoyed the story. I see you like to do alot of videogame adaptions. If the others are as good as this than you really give them justice.


SPOILERS--


The Good
-I like how you included Beowulf in the story.
-I like the way you did your action sequences you left alot of it up too the readers imaagination.
-Athena's narration was pretty good.
-The swords of fire and ice was a good idea. Cool.
-The script ended very well with the Demon army chanting Dante's name.

The Bad
-Dante talks to himself too much.
-Write Int. Athena's home(flashback), and write Int. Main tower main hall(present)
-I didn't like Athena that much I wanted her too be much more wiser.
-Dante's one liners were irritating. I've played the game before and I know that he does alot of the corny one-liners. that's probably why you did it.
-Sometimes the all caps were uneccesary.
-We weren't allowed to catch our breaths in between some action sequences. It just kept on going and going and going no breathers.
-When Dante wakes up you say he has Demon hands and head. What do demon heads and hands look like?
-On page five you have try instead of dry.
-I missed it who was the voice that told Dante to realize his true powers.
-Why was Idonea not allowed to fight Dante, but allowed to fight Vergil.
-How can you drop kick another person?
-The last part of the script really started to lose steam.

I think this script could be shortened just a little bit. I'm not sure which parts should be taken out, but you coulld probably decide that. Once again the script was very good. Keep up the great writing.


Good Luck.


Thanks for the read, Anthony.  Your critiques make a lot of sense and you actually brought up something I was waiting to be said.  The amount of battles I have in the screenplay is about one too many I think.  I had a whole graph of battles I wanted in this screenplay mapped out and I just think I used too many.  The problem was that I liked all of the battles.  I didn't want to take any out.  However, I did have some more dialogue driven scenes that I took out because I thought they were too boring, but I think I may go back and put them in to give the reader and audience some time to breathe.  I had some scenes that explained Athena's backstory and what Vergil was doing in the Underworld after Dante killed him.  I think that would help establish some more character to them both, considering they take a back seat to Dante.  

As for the voice speaking to Dante before he turns to a Demon, I really don't have a set character's voice.  At first I had Sparda's voice, then Eva's, then Hades, then Vergil.  But after a while i was just like suck it, and just put VOICE (V.O.).  It's pretty much who ever you want it to be.  As for me, I would probably lean towards Sparda, but I dunno.

So thanks for the feedback and it shows that I could have used some more "downtime" scenes, I was just too scared to have them.  Silly me.

I hope you enjoyed it as much as I did writing it.

    

Posted by: guyjackson (Guest), June 5th, 2006, 12:14am; Reply: 14

Quoted from dcooper


You seem to like writing video game adaptions which I find interesting. I like to know if you are adapting more int he near future.


As of now I have a short list of possiblites.  The higher up the list, the more interested I am in writing it.

Tenchu: Stealth Assassins (Very keen on this one)
Kingdom Hearts
Metal Gear Solid
Killer Instinct
Parasite Eve
Mercenaries: Playground of Destruction
Final Fantasy X
Resident Evil 4
StarFox (hehe)
Posted by: dcooper, June 6th, 2006, 8:27am; Reply: 15
Metal Gear Solid would be awesome!! The could easily be adpated into a movie, with allof those cinema's the games have.

However, I was thinking about you adapting Resident Evil 4. That would be interesting beacuse the story is kinda corny. However, you could intersect Leon and Ada's story together, and add additional scenes revolving Luis backstory. The dialouge from the game needs some serious rewritting to make it more serious. Since the game basically take place in about a full day, it will be interesting what chapters from the game you would flesh out and show. Also, I was thinking about Ashley. I would make her a little older. Also, it would be better to base it off of the PS2 VERSION of the game which has expanded story and levels for Ada.
Posted by: Bates, June 7th, 2006, 2:49pm; Reply: 16
Guy, sorry i didn't have this review posted sooner. But better late than never, right?

Spoilers!!!






You have a very good opening and wasted no time at all at getting straight into the story. Straight away it is the fall of the tower by Sparda and straight after that we meet Dante and Vergil as adults in the middle of a fierce swordfight. That is a good introduction to their characters.

After the opening the pace never slowed down at all during this script, it kept me reading. So good job there.

Your action descriptions are very good, you always make clear what is going on. There were some really good action scenes throughout this script. My favourites have to be when Dante faces off against Lucifers four children ontop of the tower, and the  battle between Chaos and Vergil which leads into the final battle between Chaos and Dante.

I was shocked when Vergil betrayed Dante and went after the power of Sparda out of greed. I honestly expected the two brothers to fight side by side until the end, good job with this because i really like when surprises are added into movies. Its something to talk about when the movie ends.

I liked how you ended this. It is almost like a cliffhanger setting up a sequel for Dante to deal with Lucifer. Are you going to be writing a sequel at any time because i for one would definitely read it as i found this script enjoyable and interesting.

There wasn't much wrong with this script, but i spotted a few typos which follow... Page 5 "Dante manages to stab Dante" it should be Vergil. Page 96 you have "stars" instead of "starts". Page 102 you have "staring" instead of "starting" and Page 105 you write " as soon as the reach the ground" i think "the" should be replaced with "they". I'm not trying to nit pick, i'm just tying to help you help by pointing these out so you can go back and fix them at some point.
Your format is fine, the only thing i will say about it is, lose the Cut To's. I too was guilty of using these until someone pointed out they are not needed as the next slugline identifys a new scene on it's own. Also, you need to capitalise the introduction of Athena.

Chaos tells Vergil that he killed his mother, but a little later he seems to only figure it out with Dante when Hades tells them the story in the flashback. I think you should have Vergil tell Dante that Chaos claims to be the one who killed their mother and then have Hades confirming this by having Hades tell the story through the flashbacks, because i really don't think that Vergil is going to forget that. So mayabe when Dante blames Vergil for the death of their mother, Vergil comes out and says it he is not responsible and Chaos is.

Overall you a good entertaining and intersting stroy. I have been impressed with your writting. Keep it up and good luck with future writting.

All the best.

Robert

Posted by: guyjackson (Guest), June 10th, 2006, 11:42pm; Reply: 17

Quoted from Bates
Guy, sorry i didn't have this review posted sooner. But better late than never, right?

Spoilers!!!






You have a very good opening and wasted no time at all at getting straight into the story. Straight away it is the fall of the tower by Sparda and straight after that we meet Dante and Vergil as adults in the middle of a fierce swordfight. That is a good introduction to their characters.

After the opening the pace never slowed down at all during this script, it kept me reading. So good job there.

Your action descriptions are very good, you always make clear what is going on. There were some really good action scenes throughout this script. My favourites have to be when Dante faces off against Lucifers four children ontop of the tower, and the  battle between Chaos and Vergil which leads into the final battle between Chaos and Dante.

I was shocked when Vergil betrayed Dante and went after the power of Sparda out of greed. I honestly expected the two brothers to fight side by side until the end, good job with this because i really like when surprises are added into movies. Its something to talk about when the movie ends.

I liked how you ended this. It is almost like a cliffhanger setting up a sequel for Dante to deal with Lucifer. Are you going to be writing a sequel at any time because i for one would definitely read it as i found this script enjoyable and interesting.

There wasn't much wrong with this script, but i spotted a few typos which follow... Page 5 "Dante manages to stab Dante" it should be Vergil. Page 96 you have "stars" instead of "starts". Page 102 you have "staring" instead of "starting" and Page 105 you write " as soon as the reach the ground" i think "the" should be replaced with "they". I'm not trying to nit pick, i'm just tying to help you help by pointing these out so you can go back and fix them at some point.
Your format is fine, the only thing i will say about it is, lose the Cut To's. I too was guilty of using these until someone pointed out they are not needed as the next slugline identifys a new scene on it's own. Also, you need to capitalise the introduction of Athena.

Chaos tells Vergil that he killed his mother, but a little later he seems to only figure it out with Dante when Hades tells them the story in the flashback. I think you should have Vergil tell Dante that Chaos claims to be the one who killed their mother and then have Hades confirming this by having Hades tell the story through the flashbacks, because i really don't think that Vergil is going to forget that. So mayabe when Dante blames Vergil for the death of their mother, Vergil comes out and says it he is not responsible and Chaos is.

Overall you a good entertaining and intersting stroy. I have been impressed with your writting. Keep it up and good luck with future writting.

All the best.

Robert



Thanks for reading, Robert.  It looks like you enjoyed reading the screenplay and I am happy you did.  You mentioned my action sequences and I take a lot of pride in them.  That's something that I really work on and take very seriously.  I think the more you can display in words, the better the actual live action sequences will be.  The fact that you were able to recreate the scenes in your mind with clarity shows I did my job.  The ending was definately a cliffhanger, and I am most certainly going to write a sequel to this.  Devil May Cry is meant to be a multipart story and I will make it that way.

Thanks for pointing out those typos.  I don't know what the hell I was thinking, but I overlooked some careless mistakes, but I thank you for highlighting them.

Once again, thanks for the read and the review.  Your comments are very helpful and I will use them to my advantage.

    

Posted by: Lee, September 29th, 2006, 12:52pm; Reply: 18
Hi there, So I readed your script, and yet me say great job well done. I'm a big fan of Devil May Cry the game, So when I read this script is almost the sequel to part 3, that what I believe.
So great job, I enjoyed it.
Posted by: guyjackson (Guest), September 30th, 2006, 1:13pm; Reply: 19

Quoted from Lee
Hi there, So I readed your script, and yet me say great job well done. I'm a big fan of Devil May Cry the game, So when I read this script is almost the sequel to part 3, that what I believe.
So great job, I enjoyed it.


Well first things first, welcome to Simply Scripts, Lee.  I see you are new around here.  Second thank you for reading my script.  I am glad you enjoyed it.  When I write video game adaptations my main  priority is for the gamers that read it to enjoy it.  After all they are the biggest fans of the subject and will either love you or hate you based on the adaptation.  I am a big fan of Devil May Cry too so I really wanted to respect the material but try and spin my own story onto it.  I'm sure you can see that I used the tower from DMC3 as well as Dante and Vergil's weapons.  Athena was a spin off of Lady but not fully.  I'm hoping to maybe introduce Lady or perhaps Trish in the sequel I have in the works.

Anyway I commend you for reading a script on this site and commenting on it.  You are well on your way to becoming a respected member here on SS.  

Thanks again and hopefuly if you are a writer I will be able to take a look at your work in the near future.

Posted by: tonkatough, October 7th, 2006, 9:08pm; Reply: 20
Nver heard of the Devil May Cry game. I'm a more of an Oddworld fan! Love that series of game.


This script would work great as an anime. Some crazy stuff going on here.

This script is well written, but the action scenes got just a little bit too monotonous.
It would look fantastic on screen but to read it just got a little boring.

The descriptive writing of the battles and action right down to the minute detail really dragged down the script and brought the story to a halt.

Is it really necessary to describe every detail of thrust and parry? The script is so dense with action that there is little room for plot.

This is the one area where this script suffers. There is not enough plot structure and drama. I would have like to seen more conflict and rage between the two brothers or had Chaos use the feud between two brothers to seduce one bro and have him destroy the other. Anything other than a string of big action fights.

Scenes like the test with the whirling blades and the travelling in the cart down the tunnel to hell /underworld did nothing to advance the story and would be better off cut. As some one above said, you need to cut back some of the stuff you have in this script, but I feel not to shorten the length of the script but to make room so you can insert more story and plot.

A good effort but with a little more story and a little less fighting and this could have been sweet.
Posted by: guyjackson (Guest), October 8th, 2006, 2:17am; Reply: 21
Thanks for reading Tonka.  You know I actually read over this a couple days ago and I wholeheartedly agree with you about the fight scenes.  I think my logic when I was writing was that the game is literally a non-stop third-person action fighting game.  So I wanted to keep that feel as close as possible with the fight scenes.  I think I have like seven fight scenes in total in this script and I think it's just a couple too many.  I definately sacrificed storyline for the action and it hurt the script.

My main goal with this was to see how I could transfer the game to screenplay format and I think I accompished some of what I wanted to do, but not all.  I actually have a sequel in the works for this and I really want to get a coherent story that can compliment maybe four or five good fight scenes that have actual impact on the storyline.  So thank you for you imput I really appreciate it.

Well I'll thank you again for reading.  I am grateful for you review.  Especially considering I wrote this about five months ago.  So the fact that people still are interested is great.  
Posted by: jaybronxny, December 21st, 2007, 9:23am; Reply: 22
hey guy, jaybronx here. i'm currently reading your devil may cry script (I'm also reading your heavenly sword script as well) i should post a review for both soon.
I have a two part question. One: if you could check out my script, Merciless. And two, are you creating anymore video game adaptions?  
Posted by: guyjackson (Guest), December 21st, 2007, 2:04pm; Reply: 23

Quoted from jaybronxny
hey guy, jaybronx here. i'm currently reading your devil may cry script (I'm also reading your heavenly sword script as well) i should post a review for both soon.
I have a two part question. One: if you could check out my script, Merciless. And two, are you creating anymore video game adaptions?  


Of course, I'll check out your screennplay and give you some feedback as soon as I can.  I hope you enjoy both of those screenplays, I had a lot of fun writing them.

As for more video game adaptations, I most certainly will be writing more.  They are my favorite to write.  As a matter of fact I have a couple up my sleeve right now that I'm formulating.  So you'll see some more around.

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