Pinocchio Browne by Derek Lister - Comedy - Harry Browne has a bad case of writer's block. It's years since his last novel and his life and relationships are falling apart. Help comes in the form of reluctant hit man Michael Kollodi. But Kollodi has stepped straight out of the pages of a book Harry is struggling to write, and the complications that ensue are far more mind boggling than anything he could have imagined.  105 pages - pdf, format 8)

Hello Derek,

I read your screenplay with interest. I'm not sure what your intention was when you posted on this site, but I have some comments if you'd like me to PM them to you.

Regards,

David Bussell

Hi David,
I live in London and wanted some US comments on the material, so fire away!

Hi Derek,

Sorry old bean, I'm a Londoner too! I'll give you my two cents (or in this case one penny's) worth anyway.

Too busy to get into it right now but I'll mail you tomorrow.

David

Hi Derek,

Did you not get the PM I sent to you a couple of weeks ago? I sent you a detailed critique of your work but you never responded. Maybe you haven't checked your mail, or perhaps you didn't care for my critique?