Battle of the Planets by Jonathan Garland (wordartisan) - Adventure - Rumours of a high-tech terrorist organisation called Spectra are spectacularly confirmed when an enormous mechanical assault vehicle begins to appear. But the International Science Organisation has an answer in the form of a team of exceptional youngsters - G-Force! 79 pages - pdf, format 8)

Cool work.  Go back over it and ask yourself if it isn't too cheezy and cliche.

Glad you liked it.

Yes, there's quite a bit of cheese. Especially that opening (pre-credits) sequence, which could probably be dropped without damaging the script much.

But, like a pizza, cheese is an essential ingredient. Let's face it, we're talking about five kids who dress like birds and fly out to battle evil in a ship that turns to fire. Embrace the cheese!