The Stringman Incident by Tim Stubinski - Comedy - They call Nathan Stringman a geek, only concerned with books, music and playing online computer games with his even geekier friends. He stumbles through his high school days seemingly oblivious but secretly hoping for something exciting to happen, anything.  101 pages - pdf, format 8)

This is one of the better unproduced screenplays I've seen on this site (although I only became aware of it a few days ago). The formatting is perfect, at 101 pages it's a good length and the use of lesser known screenplay writing tools such as subordinate slug lines is impressive. The tone worked for the comedy genre and the dialogue flowed well and wasn't on the nose. I'm sure many of these strengths can be attributed to a fair bit of rewriting before showing it to others. An example for others to follow!

p70 I didn' t see him but I sure the hell
k n o w i t wa s h i m .

p71 Nathan looks up her
and smiles

p73 MORRIS ( O. S. )
What is Nathan Stringman dong
fraternizing with

p80 Why don' t you
back to your real friends?


Nice script. I read the whole thing. 613 represent!