The Lakeside by Alex (lexi) - Thriller - Amanda and her friends went to a cabin by a lake for a weeks vacation, but when a young boy turns up looking for his campsite, with a story about a boy killed by the lake, stange things begin to happen. Is it something to do with the stranger or is there something behind the boy's story?  77 pages - doc, format 8)

I thought I'd make a few comments to having quickly skimmed over your script. First, don't put in the words OPENENING CREDITS. Second, there are no period symbols between words when describing the scenes, don't write INT. HOUSE. DAY. write INT. HOUSE - DAY instead. Next, it's a bad idea to put in any CUT TO's. So get rid of them. Your dialogue isn't formatted properply. Don't give any characters exact ages, it's too exclusive. Next, don't give a list of your characters on the first page. Unless you've got some personal relationship with an interested producer, no producer or director cares about having a list of the characters' names. Your front page should be the title of the script, in bold letters, underlined, then two spaces underneath that the words Written by, then two spaces underneath that your name. Then in the lower left corner WGA # whatever, and underneath that Copyright whatever year. Next, leave a space open between scene headings and the paragraphs where you describe the scene. Next, your script needs to be at least 90 pages. But if you format your dialogue properly, you may find that you properly have about 90 pages or more. Try to keep the cursewords to a minimum, the less times you say fuck or whatever else the more attractive the script looks.