Braksnen,

I like this one. Again, it has an honesty about it. It isn't academic. It's felt.

Have you read any Bukowski? Your work, in a way, reminds me of his.  If not, check out Night School. While you're at it, check out a few of his others poems. You'll probably dig 'em.

Seth

You know, Poe said poetry was like math. Every syllable and word fitting only where they could. He proved it with one poem but I can't remember which one.

Not much of a fan of his but I like Ullalume.

You should read it.

http://www.online-literature.com/poe/579/