I enjoyed this story. There's a kind of honesty about it. It's low-key, and appropriately so. I especially liked the end, which was, imo, perfect.
Still, as with most screenplays, this one is not without its problems. The format is off. This, though, can be corrected by downloading one of the various free formatting programs ...
Screenplay Article Links & SoftwareThe writing had a novelistic feel. Many of the sentences could be shortened. For example, given that Ben is 17, readers will know he's a teenager. That said, rather than writing, "BEN, a 17-year-old teenager is sitting at his computer." You could write: "Ben, 17, sits at a computer..." By writing
sits rather than
is sitting, you eliminate a weak linking verb, reducing the word count -- allowing for a quicker read.
You wrote "Bewildered, Ben tries to restart his computer but fails." This is a good example of telling rather than showing. In other words, don't tell the reader Ben is bewildered, show him shaking his head or blinking his eyes. Poor examples, I know.
Some of the dialogue was on-the-nose. By that, I mean, it was obvious, at times, that what was being said was said only to push the story forward or convey information necessary to the story -- nothing wrong with that, but you should attempt to convey such information in a way that doesn't feel forced. Not an easy task.
Anyway, again, I enjoyed this story. I do, though, think it would benefit from a rewrite (of course this could be said about almost every script ever written).
Seth