Mortal Kombat by Kenneth Dyson - Adventure, Action - Three unknowing martial artists are summoned to a mysterious island to compete in a tournament whose outcome will decide the fate of the world. 111 pages - fdr, format 8)

Mortal Kombat by Kenneth Dyson - Adventure, Action - Three unknowing martial artists are summoned to a mysterious island to compete in a tournament whose outcome will decide the fate of the world. 111 pages - rtf, format 8)

Just a quick comment because I have not had time to read it properly.

Your formatting seems ok to me so there is no real problem on that front that I can see. Your descriptions are quite well written, not the best I have read but still followable and a lot of your dialog reads nicely.

The characters are also pretty well fleshed out while fitting with their computer game counterparts.

Now on to the problem.

most of this script is basically a rewrite / rehash of the Paul Anderson film (of which I am a huge huge fan) with quite a few scenes lifted from the film with almost word to word perfect dialog.

I know the basic story should be the same, mortals defending earth realm, but I really hoped to get a new version of the story, not one that has already been done.

As an MK fan I would love to give this another glance if you scrapped all the scenes stolen from the 1995 movie and gave us your own unique version.

Well you're right dude; but I should've stated that I was gonna use the dialog from the flick, some things are diff, more matches, some are from the game itself.  The violence was my idea cause, the game itself was violent, and I have know idea why Paul Anderson didn't want it to be R, or maybe it was the studio, who knows. But yes, I will look over my work.