The Four by Lawrence Watson (lawrence142002) - Western - A gentleman gunfighter is accused of stealing a gold shipment headed to Ft. Knox. Chasing him is a vengeful old Colonel who also hires a legendary Marshal to track him. The gunfighter runs into an old friend and a new face who offer to defend him. But things are not as they seem. Who really took the gold? - rtf, format 8)

couple of things. I must admit, I didn't get very far.

Format is just, well, after looking at so much correctly formated scripts, it's really rough to try and get through. Try celtx. It's a free download and you can do most things you would need to.

You go from credits (which unless there's something special going on during them that is intertwined, is unnesscary) to "We..." There is no we in a script and unless this is a script that is shooting right now, don't number your scenes.

The dialogue was also clunky.Scenes went too far (is there a need for us to see him pay the telegraph clerk?).

Might I add that you should read Blood, Guns, Silence by sheepwalker. A pretty well done western by a board member.

Tim