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Posted by: Don, November 4th, 2007, 2:57pm
Running Free by Geoff O'Callaghan - Drama - Young Craig Watson is snatched off a rural road by George Bender, a seriously disturbed psychotic. A couple of weeks later, George decides to kill Craig, who pleads for his life by becoming George's son. Although seriously abused, Craig lives with George leading an apparently normal life. When Craig becomes too old, George attempts to replace Craig with another boy, Robbie. Realising the FBI is closing in, George decides to kill Robbie, but Craig and the police rescue him. 58 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: Yosef91, November 19th, 2007, 3:52pm; Reply: 1
Because of the multiple formatting errors, I couldn't get past the first two pages.  Typically, writers do not tell producers or directors how to make the film, a cast of characters is not included, nor is a treatment.

If you want reads, I would suggest a basic screenwriting book.  The Screenwriting Bible is my favorite.  I would love to read this story in correct format.
Posted by: sniper, November 19th, 2007, 5:31pm; Reply: 2
Also, you need to go over your logline again. Loglines are supposed to teasers. You just told us the entire story (which actually sounds quite interesting), so now there's no real point to reading the script I'm affraid.
Posted by: ABennettWriter, November 19th, 2007, 5:39pm; Reply: 3
The logline is supposed to tell you who the protagonist and antagonist are, and their conflict. Because their conflict is each other, in a well crafted story.

"To overcome to evil Lord Meanie, Good Guy must find three precious stoned hidden deep in the Bad Guy Mountains."
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