Sadness Undone by Rajesh Bhardwaj - Short, Drama - Steven Manning is a happy-go-lucky guy and has the world in his hands until his mother dies. How does an optimistic man react to this sort of news?  16 pages - pdf, format 8)

Hey, Rajesh,

I can't explain how relieved I was to be browsing through the lists and finally came across a story that wasn't a damned horror.  But, I have to admit, I didn't really get into this one.  I think it might be a bit anti-climactic.

There's a lot of possibilities to make this a very moving script, but you never really explore any of them.  It's basically just 'this happens, but no one does anything, then this happens and people still don't do anything, then he finds a picture and he sits on the beach until it ends.'

There's a couple technical and grammar issues, but I don't like getting into those, as I'm sure somebody will come along and critique them.

I like sticking strictly to the story, which, I'm afraid, I didn't really care for.  Maybe a rewrite, and some action will pick this one up a bit. (not movie action, but have the characters do something besides just get coffee and stare.)

Sorry.  :-)

-  Mark