School Spirit by Paul J. Gorzkowski - Comedy - Fourteen year old Zack Zebler and his friends Ryan tyler and Lindsay Bloodworth, who are freshman students of Gradlin High School go through each day at school battling their bullies until they are paid a visit by someone from the past who comes back for revenge. Dudley Moorehouse is the "School Spirit!" A fourteen year old nerdy former student who, thirty-years prior, was locked in an old abandoned closet in the far reaches of the school boiler room where he was left for dead.  141 pages - pdf, format 8)

So what do you readers think about my script? I would really appreciate some feed back on it. It would greatly help me in the future...Constructive critisism is great for writers who are just starting out...

Hey Paul, if you want reads you should start to read other peoples scripts first. Or you can start an exchange thread for your script.

~Zack~

Hey, I was gonna make a comment on the absurd page count (a script like yours should rarely exceed 110 pages), then I noticed that your margins were way off.

Lazy me would just tell you to download celtx -- a free screenwriting program at http://www.celtx.com -- or go through all your margins box in options and click "Default".

Not so lazy me would give you the correct (I think) margins:

Left: 1.5 inches
Right: 1 inch
Top: 1 inch
Bottom: 1 inch

Screenplay Element Margins:
Slugline: left margin 1.5 inches
Action: left margin 1.5 inches
Character name: left margin 3.7 inches
Dialog: left margin 2.5 inches, right margin 2.5 inches (or 6 inches from left edge of page)
Parentheticals: left margin 3.1 inches, right margin 2.9 inches

(I don't even know what that means and I've been writing for a while now.)

If I were you, I'd just go with lazy me and download celtx.  If you're just starting out with screenwriting, celtx is easily the best tool you can have.  And it does all that margin junk for you.