Hey everyone!  I just finished up work on my latest short, and wanted to post it here to see what you all thought.

I was going to post the script some time ago, but by the time I got around to it, we were so close to production, I figured it wasn't worth it.

http://www.vimeo.com/1189256

Check it out and let me know what you think.  

Didn't really care for it.

I was really impressed with the shooting quality, though.  Very professional looking.

The acting wasn't the best in it, but like escapist said, the shooting quality was great. I don't understand, though, why he'd get so embarrassed of a picture he accidentally took of himself. It's not that big of deal, and considering how easy-going she is (especially when she finds out her purse was stolen and that what's-his-name was lying about her phone), she would find the picture funny rather than...I don't know what...I guess it's the fact that he doesn't want her to know that he was messing with her phone, but then again, it isn't that big of a deal.

Sean

I didn't really have any issues with it myself, although I did think that he was going to take a picture of his junk and end up scrambling to get rid of that.

Wow, tough crowd.  :-)

I guess what I was trying to get across was that the picture was proof of his "creepiness", so he wanted to get it off of there.  Nothing more.

Quoted from Grandma Bear You asked our opinions. No one is being mean. Just honest.

Oh, I didn't think anyone was being mean.  :-)

I have to get used to criticism.   I was just trying to emulate the sweaty comic standing on stage tugging at his shirt.

Hey Matthew, I'm sorry but it was cut and I didn't understand very much the dialogues, so it stop to run when the guy picked the cell phone up as the woman was in the restroom. I hope to open it agina and watch it better.

Let me know: have you directed it? who are the couple? how many people you used to shot?

Btw, about the comments above, this is the price to put the face out to punch. When it doesn’t hurt anymore, you are ready, dude.

I'll continue traying to see it anyway.

hey dressel!
the quality of this was really good, very top notch! I thought this was a really effective short, pretty funny, but I found the girls acting a little off, i thought she was going to have some deep dark secret and I don't think thats what you were trying to get across. I don't think an iPhone is that complicated to figure out but I guess there's a lot of people lacking tech skills but you think he'd be better informed from meeting through the internet? But regardless it still works and you get across the rush of the situation well! Good work, look forward to more of your shorts!

Hey Dressel,

Excellent work on the short. It had some really nice production values. The editing and camera work were great. I loved the sudden lighting and music change you used to express the mans nervous panic.

I felt the quality of the acting was fairly inconsistent. Some parts were quite bad, other were much better.

What camera did you shoot this on?

Good work

Nice job on this! I started watching, a little hesitant, and found myself hooked almost instantly. You establish a really engaging scenario that I found awkward and amusing. Again, great work.

Ok, this wasn't as bad as people above me are making out; it actually entertained me, and made me laugh on a number of occasions.

My biggest problem with it was the acting. Up until the man accidently took the picture of himself, both actors weren't doing a very good job. I am actually going to blame the script... I wasn't really feeling the dialogue for the first half. But I felt the acting improved after he accidently took the picture. From then on, both actors improved (even if the women was still a little stiff...).

Congratulations though man, this was very entertaining. For me, the thing which stood out as being the best was the quality, and the direction. What equipment (camera, lighting, boom mic etc.) did you use? And how much did you have to pay to use the location of the restuarant?

But yeah, congratulations mate... great work!

I also watched "Holy Water", which in my opinion was a lot better than "Return to Menu". It was better acted, and highly entertaining; I laughed a lot man.

Great work!