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Posted by: batman, July 22nd, 2008, 6:47am

Hi there, i wrote a script, which is posted on this web site called 'Without Conscience'. That was a few years ago and since then i have shot my first feature film called 'Swimming in circles'. I shot it for under a hundred pounds and it's being screened next month. However the trailer is on You Tube and i would appriciate any feedback people might have on it, as the feedback i got for 'Without Conscience' really helped me with this film!

http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=fYz8rsgtUOU

Posted by: Don, July 22nd, 2008, 10:25am; Reply: 1

James,

Please modify the above post to include a link to the trailer. That might help garner some views and response.

Don

Posted by: Zombie Sean, July 22nd, 2008, 4:44pm; Reply: 2

I thought the beginning of the trailer was great. Those are a lot of awkward questions and she doesn't seem to have any problem asking them.

It looks good. It looks like an independent film about a love story that I'd probably enjoy (such as Wristcutters: A Love Story, THAT was a good movie).

Good job. Tell us how it goes.

Sean

Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), July 23rd, 2008, 12:40am; Reply: 3

I liked the way it started and ended, but I would've liked to have a seen a few more scenes with dialogue in the middle, because it kinda came across as a music video that was book ended by one scene.
Also, one of the questions that flashed up on the screen said "Do I have a drugs problem?" I would've written drug problem not drugs problem.
But overall I thought it looked pretty interesting.

Posted by: batman, August 21st, 2008, 2:11pm; Reply: 4

A few weeks back i put a post up for people too take a look at the trailer for my first Feature film, called Swimming in circles! From just that i got some really helpfull feedback along with a few offers from film festivals, which i was really surprised by. I just wanted to thank anyone who watched my trailer! It's strange to make a film for a hundred quid and have people say they really liked it. For Anyone who hasn't seen it and would like too it's available on You Tube. And the film has a number of screenings lined up! Also if anyone's made a really low budget film (Hundreds not thousands) and there's a trailer or anything online, i'd love to see it!

Thanks again!

Dominic Patterson

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fYz8rsgtUOU