Quoted from stebrown
The main problems I have with this one are;
The script is littered with errors. Typos, spelling mistakes, sentences starting in lower case. I mean I know you only had a week to write this but the amount shows that this wasn't even proof read once. I wouldn't normally mention that but it got distracting.
As far as the challenge went I think you hit the horror part, might have been a little too gorey for a YA but the hoax was pretty well done. I think if you had a bit more time to really flesh this out then it would be a nice little short, but as it is it just felt far too forced.
Quoted from slap shot
technically, this was the cleanest script that i have read so far...it had a little "war of the worlds" feel to it which made it a little predictable...in its defense, it's really hard to have an original story germinate in 13 pages...it was a clean, easy read, that incorporated the guidelines of the owc...good job..
Quoted from Sandra Elstree.
I mostly really (mostly really?) well, almost completely and thoroughly enjoyed this except for a few things.
The writer shows too much talent to leave too obvious typos unattended even if it's an OWC. Not capitalizing the first letter at the beginning of a sentence and glaring typos bother me when I know the person writing it is better than that.
Other than that I really enjoyed the dialogue between the boys and I think the pacing worked well.
Two things that I would adjust:
1. No hurting of little chihuahuas is this script because I think it distorts the fun mood you've got going.
2. End with your last bit of dialogue of "I say we get the heck out of town."
Good job on this one. Easily my favorite so far.
And P.S. ... I love the word "things" in the title. Just give that bit of a jab to all the old English that ever existed in your life who said you should search for better nouns to describe things. :)