Superman: Man of Steel by Jacob F. Keller - Action - Unknown/Unproduced version wherein Superman takes on the sinister android Metallo with a Kryptonite heart. 116 pages - pdf, format 8)

If this was a fan fiction script - I loved it!  Every part of it.  Metallo, Lex, Lois, Jimmy, Clark having a hard time doing what us humans have to do, tell someone how we feel.  It's harder than saving the world some times!

Well done, and I just went from page to page wanting to see what would happen next!

I just took a quick peek at this one, but this looks like a pretty solid and fun read. Putting it on my list to sit down and check it out more thoroughly.

I really enjoyed it


It had something for everyone

Um,

25 pages in and nothing happens. The opening scene was weak and is there any reason to re-introduce us to the superman story? No antagonist was established and the dialog reads like a tv series -  which btw is not bad,  just not big screen worthy.

I would start cutting away and amp the first 25 way up. On a plus, the writing is polished,  dialog a bit on the nose, and we need more conflict.

Gl with the script

Tony