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Posted by: Dimitris, November 13th, 2009, 7:35pm
I want to write a silent scene . What i mean silent is that people screaming , things happen  but there is no sound.

Its important to the plot .....

How to do it ?
Posted by: Baltis. (Guest), November 13th, 2009, 7:48pm; Reply: 1
I'd say --

INAUDIBLE SCREAMS of MUFFLED panic.  

something to those extents should work just fine.
Posted by: Dimitris, November 13th, 2009, 8:34pm; Reply: 2
Thanks Baltis .

I need to be more specific....

This is a big scene with lot of things happen , like a guy talk to my character , an ambulance passing , and more....

I cant say INAUDIBLE SCREAMS of MUFFLED panic, because there is much more.

Can i say something like mute in the beggining ? ( This is an example guys dont shoot me).

I want a scene like the one in the begining of <<saving private rian>>.

P.S. before someone post that this is director's thing , that i shouldn't do , i let you know that this silent scene is very important to plot , exactly because is silent.

P.S2 This is for the short i write in my partnership. Its his idea , if was me i would search of a different way.
Posted by: Baltis. (Guest), November 13th, 2009, 8:43pm; Reply: 3
It sounds like you want that and a series of shots at the same time... And that's fine, you can say "MUTE" just toss it up without the parenthases. After that skip down to your next line and start a series of events that we see.

However, remember that no software today... Other than Movie Outline handles a line break accordingly, not even Sophocles.  What you need to do is as follows.

Or, this is how I would handle it all... Probably the best way, actually.


(MUTED) SERIES OF SHOTS - DAY

A. blah blah blah blah BLAH BLAH BLAH
    blah and blah and blah and blah

notice the "blah" under the top line blah? Too many writers keep on writing and have the text like this

(MUTED) SERIES OF SHOTS - DAY

A. blah blah blah blah blah blah blah
blah blah and blah and blah and blah

Notice how the text went under the A?  That is wrong. It is unacceptable formating. Make sure you line break accordingly.  I use Movie outline now for everything I do in terms of web admins. My writing. My resumes... Java and HTML scripting... Everything, and it catches a lot. The other software, Sophocles/final Draft/Movie Magic and so forth and so on does not catch these little hang ups.  Final Draft and Sophocles are easy to adjust this little miststep but still it's something to catch.

Hope this helps.
Posted by: dogglebe (Guest), November 13th, 2009, 8:50pm; Reply: 4
You can use (MOS), which stands for 'mit out sound.'  The term comes from a German director (I don't remember who) who would say he wanted a scene shot without sound.  His acent made it sound like he was saying 'mit out sound.'

If you say it with a German accent, it actually works.

In a script, you would use it as such:
.
Crowds gather in the street, pointing upward and SCREAMING (MOS).


JOHN turns to MARY, panicky.  He grabs her shoulder.

               JOHN (MOS)
    We have to get out of here!



Phil
Posted by: George Willson, November 15th, 2009, 1:35pm; Reply: 5
If there is no MOS dialogue, you write it just like you write any other scene. There is absolutely no difference. The most you might need to do is notate that the scene is silent with either a line of action stating this or even MOS in the slug itself after the time of day. But the scene will be standard screenwriting format.
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