Quoted from ghost and_ghostie gal Sandra E. Where have you been hiding at? "Barcelona," maybe? Why you put your name on the title is beyond me because your writing style is unique. Just as unique as a fingerprint. Having read your Magic Letters x-mas story, I had to read this. This is a good example of creative writing. Describing things without the use of camera direction. Very good for the most part. Of course I have to pointout the couple of POV's you used and well fair enough, I can see your side of things here. Good visual descrptions throughout. page#11 F key #11 was interesting. I have to admit, if no one read your x-mas story, they'll be lost with some parts of this. 4 example Page#11, Ret and Moira caught by the GOM. He tells her to go upstairs and Moira replies, "Oh No. The last time I went up stairs with someone in here, I wound up pregnant." Funny IMO. (Okay, well maybe they wouldn't be lost. Strike that) I thought the dialogue was very good mixed with a little comedy too. Some of my highlights... Pseudo, "Can we play a bit? Just to third base and I wont go further?" References to the greenhouse and peeing Green reminded me of RV's script, "Green." Moira and Elwood exchange. "The weather outside is frightful, but in here my dear it's delightful." Glad to see you kept some of the other characters. Is this going to become a series? Why? because I feel their is more here then meets the eye. Anyway, this was very entertaining, a few laughs, written very well and I enjoyed this little piece. L8R Ghostwriter |
Quoted from Sandra Elstree. I'm just wondering right now, besides the use of the lovely: To Be Continued, how does one write: Last time on Magic of Letters... yada-yada-yada... Is there some kind of special format to that used in television writing? Curious and curioser. |
Quoted from grademan Sandra – This was very creative, full of whimsy, and half-thoughts… I tried to mind meld with your script but my mind over-percolated at page 15 on a long piece of dialogue. Sorry, Sandra. I really wish I could tune into your script but alas fair princess, I cannot transmute your story to logic. All I know is that I don’t want to go in the upstairs room either! Gary |