Lottery Of Deception by Rick Hubley II - Thriller - Two young MIT professors create an algorithm that accurately predicts winning lottery numbers, and in doing so, they unknowingly stumble into a government conspiracy that has them fighting for their lives. 139 pages - pdf, format 8)

The premise and logline were interesting enough to tempt me into reading this - after 3 pages I had to stop - this reads like a shooting script - too many camera angles - personal direction - WE SEE etc. Please edit this unecessary clutter from your script nad concentrate on the characters, story and visuals.