The Valuable Heritage by Gabriel .O. Kolapo (Mayoky) - Comedy - A loser arrogance horse-racer contestant Tony Cook is trying to gain love and happiness back to his family after he had causes much reproaches and shames for his wife Barbara and his two kids Mark and Kelly due to his persistent losing in annual horseracing competition in his city of origin in the united State. 104 pages - doc, format 8)

I think it's cool that you wrote a full length script however I think you should get a better handle on the english language before you go further.

The big "3rd draft" across the page is so distracting as to make each page unreadable.

So there's at least two things there for you to work on.

And here's a third thing to work on...that "logline", if that's indeed what it is.

Sorry, but it's downright terrible and will turn readers off before they've even opened up the script.

Come on, guys, it's a comedy. I thought the logline was hilarious. Try reading it out loud using a heavy accent without pausing to take a breath.

Damn, I need to quit smoking.

HaHa!  Rob, that's frickin' great!  Hilarious!