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Posted by: Don, October 15th, 2010, 5:00pm
Rampage! by J Sun Martinez - Action, Adventure - An experimental drug turns three unsuspecting test volunteers into giant monsters who attack Las Vegas. Based on the video games from Midway. 120 pages - doc, format 8)
Posted by: Baltis. (Guest), October 15th, 2010, 5:05pm; Reply: 1
Man, I'd love to have read this one.  I grew up in the arcades as a kid and played this every chance I got.  I'd love to see someone do it justice for the big screen, unfortunately this script is horribly formated.  For some reason when I try to read it everything is crammed together.

Good concept, bad execution.
Posted by: screenrider (Guest), October 15th, 2010, 5:21pm; Reply: 2
Jose, you can download Celtix screenwriting software for free and easily convert this script into a better looking format.  

http://celtx.com/

As for your actual writing it needs a lot of work.  My advice, go to the action/adventure section and read some other scripts.  You'll see what I mean.  Start with the ones that have the highest number of views.   Those are usually the good ones.     Study them.   Mimic them, then find your own voice.  

All the best.
Posted by: jsunmartinez (Guest), October 22nd, 2010, 9:07pm; Reply: 3
I know the formatting sucks. Damn Microsoft Word. I'll re-up it soon. As far as the story goes it's action adventure. Action is discription heavy, especially in the exposition. As much as I would like to pepper in a cheap "stinger" every other page, in a story like this, it would seem forced. But I like your thought process, I know you mean well. Thank you. JM.
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