Happy Ave by I. Iacob (zazie) - Series - A corrupted priest with a secret criminal past finds out crucial stock market inside information during confession. He devises a brilliant get rich quickly scheme. A struggle between morality and temptation ensues.  30 pages - doc, format 8)

It's good. You should make it more of a dramedy. Add some more raunchy humor. I do like it though.

I t may appear to have potential, and visually these is some here, but it's badly written. Check page three - Frankie's dialogue should be Fr. Jacobs. Those smash cuts could simply be a montage. And Fr Jacobs initial dialogue? Not too sure, there. Needs a re-work.

It's entertaining and hilarious but as SiColl007 says the formatting could be much better.