Quoted from LC Rightio. Winshot, 'McLovin' was a character in 'Superbad' - yep, I was up one night and nothing else was on. The character was endearing in a teen-geek kind of way and the movie weirdly watchable & entertaining. 'McLovin' in your script is another character altogether. Now, I ask this question respectfully. Are you of non-English speaking background? Cause it's evident here unfort. Your script needs a lot of work, and yet... there are a few lil gems of humour and inventiveness shining through the mire, despite what I surmise is a problem with the English language. What's your script about? I'm not sure. I'd have to read through again and to tell you the truth it was a lil difficult first time around. If I'm wrong and English is your native language, then you need to get working on grammar, punctuation, vocab. etc. etc. And, unless you're filming this you don't need the numerous camera directions. The last thing I want is to put you off. Your enthusiasm for this being posted lead me to read it. And you obviously love writing - that shows through. And like Superbad, your script was entertaining in a very weird incomprehensible kind of way, but you need imho to get learnin'. Read scripts here Win' and comment and find a buddy/tutor to assist you with your English. All the best :) MARK (V.O.) But later if I missed my chance I will be tired of pulling the shin guts out of my teeth and will have to revel in the most number of video hits on “Youtube” of my running around the track for life of Britney lending her vocals in the background “Oops! I did it again to the joy of others… So I went to the one place where every kid locks his door prior before they type on “www”, The Internet. It’s a place where random bytes of intelligence float amongst vast oceans of idiocy, and all of man kind in future will commit suicide in a futile effort to repent for creating such a weapon of mass destruction and any joker with easy nack would log on to the internet and google their ipod. My access was easy as Matt was guilty, which everyone thinks you are, Until proven innocent. I learned that access to Matt’s bag tomorrow was the key to his mission. Whatever ghastly thing that might be. Like a sucker I believed it. Finding the truth and the truth alone sets me free. |