Malefizio by Juan De Biase (juandescribe) - Thriller - Woeful tryst with gypsy hoodoo sinks a painter into spellbound misery. 108 pages - pdf, format 8)

To get started for comments, MALEFIZIO is the same as being possesed by mental entrapment through powerful mental sorcery in which human vision is the source.

Quoted from juandscribe To get started for comments, MALEFIZIO is the same as being possesed by mental entrapment through powerful mental sorcery in which human vision is the source.

Juan,

It helps if you read other scripts.  Then people will, in turn, read your stuff.  

-Matt

Matt,

Will start with The Other Man... expect feed-back if you read my first 10 pages.

Juan

so far so good, on page 12, i have a pretty good picture of what sofia and mark look like, especially sofia  :o, had a hard time with some of the chit chat between the art dealer and mark, but will keep reading  ;D

one thing I will say is that its a little bit slow for a thriller, like in reality I'm about 10mins into the film and not much has happened

triband,
Keep on going and you'll find the shiver. It starts slow to pace the crescendo unfolding in the Brooklyn waterfront.

Juan

Yeah man I'll be reading it all, only way to learn, maybe check mine out as well, see what you think :)

Triband,
How do I get to it, willing to peep.

Mat.
IŽve got it on PDF, will be reading and replying soon.
About Malefizio, youŽd be reading my first draf. In case you want to, I can send you my last.
Juan