Four Walls by Greg Farnese (geefar) - Short, Drama - An agoraphobic woman struggles to break through her confining disease when her overly domesticated pet cat runs away. 10 pages - pdf, format 8)

not bad, it seems like she's an old lady at the beginning. and for her getting her confidence back to leave the house i would like to see a little more than the obvious.

Amel,
There are a few things I need to eliminate and add.
Great note on the character's age. I should establish through action that the character is not "old".
In the rewrite I will change the main character's arc.
Thanks for the notes.
Greg

Geefar,

This is just a polite reminder that the SS web site is based upon a sharing principle. You need to read, review and participate. Then you may have the more experienced writers review and past comment on your work ( I don't include myself in that bracket, but I am becoming more aware of not reviewing those who have not first put in the time!)

Hope you stick around and get involved with helping others.

All the best

Its well written.
I wanted to find out what's going on, but I didn't get any answers.
It's an interesting idea, but it's almost like you didn't know where to go with it.
What's the point of the food, lady, and a growling sound?  
Are they all mirages in his mind?
It's not clear. If they are real, nothing seems to get resolved here.