TBX: The Black Xperience by AJ Moses (captNaj) - Comedy - For generations, a question has periodically intrigued people in all walks of life: what is it like to be black in America? Find out firsthand in this immersive and subversive film. Piercingly poignant, unflinchingly truthful and uproariously funny, the most marked character development in the movie may be your own. - html, format 8)

The logline drew my attention.

The idea here is actually compelling, and the approach novel.

This COULD be really good, and really funny, but the execution misses the mark.

Your narrator is ruining this piece, and I quickly grew weary of him -- and scrolling through the script I found that he just drones on and on and on and on and never stops.

My advice is let your narrator set things up, but then kick him to the curb and let the story play out without him.  This would be improved 500%.

Set things up so the viewer can draw their own conclusions without the narrator spoon-feeding everything to them.