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Posted by: Don, May 23rd, 2012, 6:57pm
Easter Island by Chip Casner - Action, Adventure - During the discovery of Easter Island by Dutch Explorers in 1722, a young linguist is left for dead by his captain and must learn to survive among the natives. 117 pagesa - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: Forgive, May 26th, 2012, 5:07pm; Reply: 1
I can't get past page two here. It's got to have the oddest start to a film ever - a discussion of crusty toes ... and then some dodgy dialogue, followed by a captain who actually says "Ahhhhhhh, ... ". You know, I actually doubt any real-life captains honestly said anything of the kind - but then what do I know?
Posted by: Doms, June 6th, 2012, 10:55am; Reply: 2
One small issue at the start: Prior to J.R.R. Tolkien, elves were seen as short, dumpy creatures and not so much as Legolas. But maybe that’s what you were going for?

Aside from that, my first impression is that you’re a skilled writer. Your writing has the right level of description and the dialogue feels natural. Additionally, your knowledge of period and nautical terms also wins you points.

I read up to page 10. I do like your writing, but I’m not a big fan of “meet the natives” stories. However, anyone that does enjoy this sort of story will really like your work.
Posted by: jcasner, June 28th, 2012, 10:23pm; Reply: 3
Thanks for the reads!  The Ahhhh probably should just have a few h's.  It's not ARRRRRR which is completely cliche and ridiculous.  I'm a better writer than that!  Thanks to both of you for giving my script a look.  Best, J.E
Posted by: jcasner, June 29th, 2012, 11:41pm; Reply: 4
Official Finalist/2012 Beverly Hills Film Festival
Finalist/2012 Honolulu Film Awards
Posted by: Doms, June 30th, 2012, 10:23am; Reply: 5

Quoted from jcasner
Official Finalist/2012 Beverly Hills Film Festival
Finalist/2012 Honolulu Film Awards


Like I said, it's very well done.

Congratulations!
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