The Legend of Bonnie and Clyde by David Edmondson - Drama - People only live happily ever after in fairy tales. The lives behind Bonnie and Clyde. Not a remake of the 1967 film, but something that has been in my head for sometime now to write. 97 pages - pdf, format 8)

Not too sure about the log-line here - maybe look up how to do them.

Lots of problems here - both in the structure of this and in your writing:

'W.D. quickly retrieves the weapons from the back--while
placing them on the ground he spots a stick--he returns to
the car.'
- quickly retrieves is over-written for the nature of what is happening - 'grabs' is better as it mirrors the action better.
- you say he spots a stick and then returns to the car, without mentioning that he picks it up. Might seem minor but little things like this matter. And is it a stick - what he does with it implies it's more like a branch.
This is one of numerous similar examples.