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Posted by: Don, February 22nd, 2013, 8:07pm
Tall, Dark and N.R.I. by Princess Reineeta Lakshman - Comedy, Romantic Comedy Bollywood Flavor - Reema Arora, peppy Punjabi beauty settles for an arranged marriage with Australian dude, Amarjit Singh. When Reema's visa to Australia doesn't arrive she goes against her family's wishes and takes off to Sydney to find Amarjit. What awaits her Down Under is a life of quirky flat mates, betraying in-laws who have no clue about Amarjit's whereabouts, and a new love! 81 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: StevenClark, February 23rd, 2013, 1:50am; Reply: 1
Hi Princess,
Just gave your script a quick 18 pg read.  Not bad.  A lot of characters flying around in the beginning had me a little confused, but as I read on I got over it.  However, too many characters too quick is never a good thing.  There are some issues with formatting.  Others will give you the details on that, I'm sure!  And your action needs to be four lines or less.  Think: less is more, less is more!
The story, however, is quite different from other things I've read, and the fact that your characters are Indian give your script an edge, I think.  Kinda like the way My Big Fat Greek Wedding took everyone by storm.  
I will keep reading.
Regards,
Steve









Posted by: insider901, February 23rd, 2013, 4:44pm; Reply: 2
Looked at the first 5 pages. It's very ethnic and it won't be for everyone, but the action is really, really good. It's very efficient. The dialogue appeared to be a tad stiff but I don't know if that's part of Indian culture.
Posted by: LC, February 24th, 2013, 12:14am; Reply: 3
I gave the first 10 or so of this a look and found it to be an effortless read, despite a few  (and only a few) English language/grammar inconsistencies which I imagine an Indian producer wouldn't care one iota about in the bigger scheme of things.

Princess Reineeta obviously knows well the target Bollywood market. A quick google search reveals she is a published novelist and produced script writer so I'm left thinking she just wanted an open forum/exposure to place her latest work??

I could see a Bollywood producer picking this up. An entertaining, colourful read with a target market in mind, if the first 10 are anything to go by.

Good luck with this!
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