The 1+6WC Theme and Genre are...

This is a 1+6 Week Challenge.   First 11 pages due in one week.  The remainder due six weeks after that.

Theme:  A man/woman's life is turned upside down after purchasing a smart phone that is supposed to go to someone else.
Genre: open

Due Dates:
First 9 – 11 pages (no more than 11) are due March 15th at 10:00 pm edt
Complete work due April 26th, at 10:00pm edt

Submit them here: http://www.simplyscripts.com/unpro_short_exercise_13_03.html

See below for further clarification.

Most Americans know the story of the "Lost Colony"¯.  It dates back to the time the Europeans began to settle on the land now known as Virginia.  The village of Roanoke was one of the first English colonies to be established on the soil.  But it didn't turn out quite as successful as the colonists had hoped"¦

The Governor of this hamlet was a man by the name of John White.  The small population of Roanoke complained about their lack of food and tools.  They also harbored suspicions that the Natives might launch a surprise attack on them.  These complaints eventually spurred John White to travel back to England, in search of weapons and supplies.  He returned three long years later.

Upon his homecoming, John White found a ghost town.  The area "“ once a thriving village - was stripped of its people.  Houses and other shelters were nowhere in site.  What was left behind were small cannons, an opened chest, a tall fence built around the perimeter, and a single word inscription carved on a fence post: "Croatoan."¯

This, of course, has absolutely nothing to do with the challenge.

For those of you unfamiliar with the OWC, TWC, 7WC or any other WC's, the idea behind it is to see if the good people here can write a script based on someone else's criteria.

If you had a week to write a ten-page horror script that took place in a nursery, could you do it?  What if you had seven weeks to write a rom-com set in the International Space Station?  Could you do that?

Well, could ya?  Could ya?

Anyway, the challenge starts tonight.  Continue reading for the rest of the rules and the specifics for this particular challenge.

BTW, do not click here.  It has nothing to do with this challenge.  So, don't click here.

Anyway, without further adieu "after all, why put off tomorrow what you can do today" the challenge will be a seven week challenge.

You have seven weeks to come up with a feature length script (between 90 and 120 pages).  The first nine to eleven pages, however, are due next Friday, March 15th, at 10:00pm edt.  Just finish the scene at this page length.  Cutting it off in mid-sentence and leaving us hanging is soooo uncool.

Submit your first ten pages [url= http://www.simplyscripts.com/unpro_short_exercise_13_03.html]here[/url] before 10:00pm est next Friday, March 15th .  Don't submit the first ten if you can't commit to the whole challenge.

The completed script is due on Friday, April 26th, at 10:00pm edt.  Submit your completed script [url= http://www.simplyscripts.com/unpro_short_exercise_13_03.html]here[/url] before 10:00pm on April 26th.

The genre and theme to this competition will be announced in a moment.  But before I do, I just want to go over a few rules and other fascinating facts:

Participation in this is voluntary.  If someone's holding a gun to your head and making you participate, call the police;

Unlike previous challenges, this one will not be anonymous.  Your names will be on your work from the get-go;

There is no betting on this challenge;

No piss-takes.  At all.  Violators of this rule will be summarily executed by duct tape, electricity and Cheetos.  Not necessarily in that order;

I've lost ten pounds on the Atkins diet and I feel great;

The genre for this particular challenge pretty flexible: comedy and/or action and/or thriller.  You decide;

The first ten pages (or so) will be posted at Don's earliest convenience;

If you don't like the genre/theme of the challenge, post it on your damn Facebook page.  Don't whine about it here;

There will be no voting on the best script.  This is not a competition and there are no winners (though, technically, we all win when we have fun);

The theme is:  A man/woman's life is turned upside down after purchasing a smart phone that is supposed to go to someone else.  You can make up your own apps for said phone, but they have to be realistic.  No jet pack apps or death ray apps.  Thank you very much;

Can you believe it?  Ten pounds on Atkins.  I'm also using raspberry ketone pills.  They boost your energy and help you burn calories and stuff.  I first heard about them on Doctor Oz.  I like this guy;

If you have any questions, write them down on a piece of paper.  Roll that paper in a tight ball and throw it out.  You'll be glad you did;

If you don't know what the challenge, genre and theme are, it's because you went straight to the bottom without reading all that I wrote here.  You suck!

Good luck!

Phil

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If someone’s holding a gun to your head and making you participate, call the police;

How do I call the police, if the gunman wont let me?

Mark

Quoted from irish eyes

How do I call the police, if the gunman wont let me?

Mark

The gunman might BE the police, lol

Quoted from stevie

The gunman might BE the police, lol

In Mark's case, that's likely...;-)

Quoted from dogglebe

The theme is: A man/womanā€™s life is turned upside down after purchasing a smart phone that is supposed to go to someone else. You can make up your own apps for said phone, but they have to be realistic. No jet pack apps or death ray apps. Thank you very much;

I'll be the first one to ask the stupid question.

I assume no time travel apps either?

Mark beat you to the stupid question, Nawazm.

But, in regards to your stupid question... there is no time travel apps.

Phil

Quoted from dogglebe

as the moderator of this thread, I thought I'd unblock you to see if you had anything significant to say. I see I made the right decision in blocking you.

You've expressed your opinion and you won't be participating in the challenge. There's no need to comment here anymore.

Phil

Phil,
Are you seriously going to moderate this thread in this way?

Jeff said nothing worth deleating ...but you did..

He simply expressed his opinion.

Unless something differient was posted just a minute ago I didnt see..

Shawn.....><

He did, Shawn. He posted three messages. I deleted all of them.

Now he's just busting balls and wasting time.

Jeff, I'm sorry that the genre wasn't torture porn. I wasn't thinking what you would approve of.

Phil

Why not let them stand?

There is a difference in moderating and censorship...

That said, I completly respect you taking this thread and owning it.

But Jeff had a point...

And you deleated it.

It can be open for an arguement ...

it is Friday night, eh?

Shawn....><

Why should Jeff--who has no intention of participating in the challenge--be allowed to run around like a spoiled child? Attacking me for personal reasons? Maybe he should dedicate more time into writing scripts that interest people than being disruptive.

Phil

How about everyone takes a step back...

Everyone here has a common goal in mind and that is to have

his or her's work noticed.

It's not worth a red cent at this point in any of our careers to go around

Attacking each or trying to "one up" each other in order to gain the attention of

someone "larger" than our community.

We may have huge differences in our over all take on what we perceive as basic script construct, format, ect...

By bitching at each other here, all we are serving up to those looking for the next great writer is, amateur site...nothing here to see...

Anyone else get this?

Shawn.....><

I'm out on this challenge. Best of luck to those in it ;)

Wow, I'm psyched. A 7WC AND a (sort-of) OWC.

I will say, I'm not loving the premise (yet), but hey, I'll take what I can get. Let's do this!

Seems you all had fun whilst I slept off the night before.

Ok, back to business.

Any genre - good

Topic/theme - a man or woman life is turned upside down when they get hold of the wrong phone etc etc i Reminds me of Greg's OWC script a while back.

Now it says, PURCHASING. I hope this part is not too strict as the method in which the person receives the phone could be quite important.

Ayway, I quite like that, open enough.

Let's get a thinking.

The 'purchasing' part has me worried too. I thought it would be easy to work out how someone ended up with another persons phone but having to buy someone's phone? I can only picture a dodgy pub and a Pikey selling it under the table lol. I can't see how a phone is made for someone else, aren't all phones the same?

You had a character called Pikey as well - how strange!

Joking aside, my initial thought does not involve buying a phone, but another 'top secret' way, like he finds it! Or she of course.

No time unfortunately to devote to this.

However, further to what Allfy said: (jeepers, that sounded formal:) i.e. the 'under the table stuff' - if you look at Ebay, people are often selling phones given as gifts/'pre-loved as new' etc. Or, you could buy one retail that someone returned to 'easy to return' shops, and not know it's been used until you happened upon something when you start using it... or someone desperately wants it back & they're on your tail!!

Or it could be packaged up perfectly, & then retailer tries to pass it off as new, then there's pre-testing of phones before they're even up for sale i.e. some internal conspiracy where someone was meant to get a particular phone and dumped it.

I'm sure if you let your imagination go, there's a lot of stuff 'purchase' could mean. I'm not up for the duration of this challenge, but I think Phil did very nicely with this rather broad theme. Just a few thoughts. Be interesting to see what you guys come up with.

Don't let the phone bog you down - it's your inciting incident but from there you can take it wherever you want.

My initial thought was of some kind of time hole a la http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Goodnight_Sweetheart_%28TV_series%29 which would give you plenty of mystery and ability to weave in a story like http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Frequency_%28film%29 nothing wrong with adapting existing films!

Lots of potential here for the SSers to develop something both commercially appealing and creatively interesting.

I'm out (waaaaaaaay too much to do right now) - but I did want to weigh in and say I like the concept in general. There's plenty of freedom to choose one's genre:

It could be action (someone gets a spy's phone)
Rom-com (there's a contact on the phone that they fall in love with)
Business -thrller (there are corporation secrets on the phone that someone wants back)
Horror (it's a serial killer's phone, and there's evidence on it that the killer wants to erase...)

Etc, etc. Just throwing ideas out there. Anyone wants these, feel free of course! And it's the sort of high concept thing that Hollywood likes, so that makes any good scripts potentially sellable...

Course, if suddenly an idea catches on fire for me, I'll think about it. But unless that happens, I'll just look forward to seeing what comes out of this.

Quoted from alffy

You can be a little flexible in acquiring the phone. But it shouldn't be a case of finding it on a table in the food court. There could've been a mix-up at the phone store or something.

And phones can be upgraded with more memory and better batteries and stuff. Why not run with it?

Quoted from crookedowl

Wow, I'm psyched. A 7WC AND a (sort-of) OWC.

I will say, I'm not loving the premise (yet), but hey, I'll take what I can get. Let's do this!

Keep in mind that no theme/genre will appeal to everyone. But what if a director asked you to write (and you were to get paid and get credit for it and have access to a craft service table), would you be able to do it?

Phil

I really like the premise - plenty of possibilities and possible genres that it could be adapted to. I haven't written anything new so far this year, but this has my creative juices flowing and I'll tentatively throw my hat in the ring in the hope I can get something finished within the 7 weeks!

I'm way out for this.

But for the record, I was really looking forward to an OWC, as I think many members were.

This heme has been done to death in amateur scripts and bad movies. It does not appeal to me in any way, but that of course is simply my opinion.

Best of luck to the 3 or 4 who take this challenge on. The rest of us and vast majority of us will just have to wait for a good old fashioned OWC.

I'll leave this thread alone now.

Firstly, well done Phil for the very entertaining announcement of this ?WC – especially enjoyed the Rick Astley link and how you tempted me with the whole “don’t click here” approach. ;D

Unfortunately, I’m going to have to bail out on this one but I do wish all that take part good luck with it. :)

It’s quite open and should lead to some interesting features.

In the last 10 page challenge, Don decided that if someone wanted to do a short, up to 10 pages, on the same theme they could. Out of that came Kevin's decent short, of Mice and Monsters, if i remember correctly.

It's not my challenge but I don't see why someone couldn't do this - there are no winners! ,or is that losers, whatever.

As the first ten pages are possibly the most important in a script, I think this is a worthy challenge, even if I decide not to take this further.

I have an idea...

Actually, Don asked for a 7WC. I just came up with the genre and theme.

Phil

Gosh...I'm teetering...busy as a bee...but like a moth to flame...I'm drawn to assignment type writing. Ugh...decisions.

Intriguing hook with your choice or premises, Phil.
But my current workload forces me to pull back from this.
I thought I could scrape together something for an OWC, but...

The lure of submitting to the Sunny in Philly producers is way too strong for me.
Gotta go after that white elephant.
Writing about that jolly bunch of deluded sociopaths? Oh, I'm in! ;D

Thanks for running the event for the site, Phil.
I'll try to carve out some time to read the first ten of each player.
Hey, it's work related! I can justify it.
Already scooped up one OWC short to develop into a feature.

Have fun folks!

Regards,
E.D.

I'm confused. Is it a 1 week challenge to write the first 10 pages or a 7WC to write a feature? According to Don it's a 1+6WC...

Quoted from Grandma Bear

I'm confused. Is it a 1 week challenge to write the first 10 pages or a 7WC to write a feature? According to Don it's a 1+6WC...

I thought it was the hybrid/simple addition option too.
So, I figured there'd likely be a bunch of "first tens".
But perhaps not all those gel, so there could be less completed features.

E.D.

Quoted from Reef Dreamer

As the first ten pages are possibly the most important in a script, I think this is a worthy challenge, even if I decide not to take this further.

I agree, Bill. They’re very important and this could be in fact a worthy challenge even if you didn’t take it any further.

But Phil also said in the announcement:

Quoted from dogglebe

Don't submit the first ten if you can't commit to the whole challenge.

A lot of us I’m sure are already working on features so the normal OWC is a nice break. I certainly can’t commit to a 7WC – too much on at the moment.

It seems like some people have a problem with the "purchasing" part, but I literally solved that in two seconds.

My only problem - I don't know if I'll be able to fit this challenge in because of school work.

I'm gonna get to work on some papers and essays and then see if I can devote more thought to this later.

Good luck to everybody else.

Interesting. Not sure if I'll enter but I'll read some of the entries either way. Hope for a good turnout.

Sounds interesting, I guess I'm in!

Sounds cool, I already have an idea but afraid won't have time to write it. Too bad for me - I developed the idea as soon as I read this, that's big for me, usually I need to brainstorm and such. Good luck to all participant. I'll read a few.

All right, I think I have something pretty good. Looking forward to reading the other entries!

As if by magic, script mag have an article on the first ten pages

http://www.scriptmag.com/features/craft-features/building-the-world-of-your-screenplay-your-first-10-pages?et_mid=606750&rid=233131191

Just don't have the character find the phone on a bus or something, okay?

Phil

That wouldn't be fun.

A time travelling script could've been fun. Shame...

Kind of agree with Jeff here. I'm not getting anything solid at the moment but I'll most likely enter. Or at least try to. :)

Cool idea, Phil!

I have a lot of other deadline work over the next couple months but I'm hoping I'll be able to get something together for this. We'll find out in a week, I guess...

Quoted from nawazm11

A time travelling script could've been fun. Shame...

Kind of agree with Jeff here. I'm not getting anything solid at the moment but I'll most likely enter. Or at least try to. :)

I don't understand. Is it too boring of an idea?

I'm already coming up with ideas of gangsters, explosions, lots of guns, t&a ;D

Quoted from reaper550

I don't understand. Is it too boring of an idea?

I'll try not to whine but, and this is just my opinion, the idea doesn't do much. It's not boring but basically a little bland. Judging from the comments though, I seem to be alone here.

I've got one idea that I'm juggling around with but it doesn't involve any gangsters or explosions! The theme isn't my thing but I'm still going to enter just for practice in case this was a producer asking me to write a script. :)

It's what you make of it, really.  I left it fairly open so everyone has elbow room.  If people can't come up with something, they're not trying.  When I came up with this, ideas raced through my head if I was going to participate.  Hell, I was dreamcasting my idea.

I remember people complaining about the old challenges because the genre/theme were too hard and that the scripts would end up being nothing that filmmakers would want.  I go the other way and people still have problems... and this competition could produce scripts that are very commercial and filmable

Oh well.  Can't please everyone.

Phil

I can totally see where you're getting at, Phil. :)

Finally got an idea, a very special and unique one, I think this could work. Definitely entering now.

All right! Working on the outline now!

Hope you guys like dark comedy......

As these aren't going to be anonymous we might as well be open with our ideas and see how we can help each other.

I have two and neither is giving me the feeling I can get it done in a week.

Excuse the crap loglines, this is all very rushed.

The Fourteenth Gland

An ambitious scientist is hunted by both the police and Russian mafia around London for a murder he didn't commit, and for an artefact he doesn't possess - something which is meant to bestow eternal life, called the fourteenth gland.

Genre - chase thriller

Problems - I feel I have a unique hook for this, but it's a complicated script which I'm finding a bit overwhelming to put together - something that could just need longer to do.

Phone Buddy

When a socially awkward musician has a near death experience when he saves his new high tech phone, actually a secret service device destined to infiltrate an unknown drugs ring, he discovers the phone has come to life. Against his wishes, it's now his new best friend and it wants to party, whilst the secret service think he's the gangster.

Genre - slapstick comedy

Problems - I feel this is easier to do, but maybe a little light weight.

Ok, they're a bit different

As Steve pointed out, there is a request that if you enter you carry on, which I find a little off putting.

Happy to consider other writers ideas and share feedback.

Time will tell.

Well,

For the fourteenth gland, why not stick with one good guy and one bad guy. Also, make it into a murder. Keep it simple. lol.

For Phone buddy, you're trying to cram too much info. Follow what Babz said: noun + verb + irony = logline. One of the best things I've learned from her.

Hope this helps,
Gabe

Quoted from Reef Dreamer

As these aren't going to be anonymous we might as well be open with our ideas and see how we can help each other.

That's what the point of the 7WC has always been. To help each other out. Share what you're writing about, ask for help when you are struggling, hold each others hands and help finish the script.

I like that name Phone Buddy, Bill. Very cool name. Definitely has commercial potential, IMHO. Not sure I'm too keen on the premise, though. I think you'd be better off substituting the phone for an actual character. Might be a little too wacky otherwise.

Quoted from Reef Dreamer

The Fourteenth Gland

I like this one. It has the potential to be a generic thriller, but I think the sci-fi angle makes it original. Not sure I'm loving the title, though...

Quoted from Reef Dreamer

Phone Buddy

I like this one, especially the title. I'm not sure about it being slapstick, but that's just personal taste.

Thanks folks

I think that IF I enter, and this is looking unlikely now, it would be for phone buddy. I just feel too lost with the other.

For others considering an entry, feel free to raise questions for feedback as this not anonymous, or a competition.

The title of mine...now that I'm 'in' this thing is DEAD CELL. I'll get log together Monday. I've written six pages. It's in the vomit stage though :)

Strange, Bill. My original idea was about a sociopath who receives a phone that starts talking to him and tells him to commit murders ;D. Maybe it's a sign you should go with Phone Buddy, although I do like both ideas.

For mine, I'm thinking I'll name it "Memories of a Forgotten Love". 7 pages in, after I finish the first 10 I'll try and think of a log.

Thanks Phil for the 1+6WC though I will have to opt out because I just dont have the time to commit !!!!

I have a few projects all running in parallel ATM so struggling for time.

I hope you get enough takers.

Regards Alex

Dena - I *like* that title. (Dead Cel) :)

I thought I was prolific.... But I think you're taking the "Stephen King" award! I'm impressed... :)

Okay, here's mine. Be brutal....

It's Not You, It's Ryan

(or any other first name that will work. I haven't really settled on one).

A man who works at lost and found in an airport comes across a cellphone that belongs to his wife's lover. He digs deeper, only to find the man his wife is cheating with is a total weirdo, maybe even a stalker.

Thriller/dark comedy.

Quoted from crookedowl

It's Not You, It's Ryan

(or any other first name that will work. I haven't really settled on one).

A man ~~who works at lost and found in an airport~~ comes across a cellphone that belongs to his wife's lover. He digs deeper, only to find the man his wife is cheating with is a total weirdo, maybe even a stalker.

I'm not feeling your logline, nor the others' either.

Okay, I'd get rid of that for starters-- you don't need it. Then re-work the second half of it.

Ghostie

Yeah... it's definitely not my final log, but I wanted to get the basic story across. Just wanted to know if the story itself was good. But then again, maybe I was too vague.

Thanks for the input.

Was thinking of entering with:

Naughty Claws

A stuck up business woman mistakenly buys a stolen phone from a dodgy pawn shop and is suddenly thrust into the life of an unconventional Angel, where mischief and mayhem take their toll in her pursuit to achieve a set of wings.

?? If I can figure the whole story out in time.

Quoted from RJ

Yeah, at this stage loglines are a work in progress, this sounds more like a comedy-- but what I like about your approach -- having the woman purchase a cell at what appears to be a rogue pawn shop. As I was mauling over ideas, something like that --never crossed my mind. I almost wished I had thought of it.

Ghostie

Quoted from crookedowl

A man who works at lost and found in an airport comes across a cellphone that belongs to his wife's lover. He digs deeper, only to find the man his wife is cheating with is a total weirdo, maybe even a stalker.

I think the idea could work but would be lots of work to make this (seemingly) simple story interesting.

Quoted from RJ

A stuck up business woman mistakenly buys a stolen phone from a dodgy pawn shop and is suddenly thrust into the life of an unconventional Angel, where mischief and mayhem take their toll in her pursuit to achieve a set of wings.

Definitely original but like Ghostie mentioned, it sounds like a comedy - which might not be your intent.

Finished the first 11 pages, excited! Know where my story is going. But this may be one of the hardest features I've had to write. The story is non-linear and spans across three decades as we follow a man through four key moments of his life. Haven't got a log yet but I think I'm going to break some of the rules to convey the story.

Dena - Dead Cell - good title. I trust this has a dark element to it.

Mo -"Memories of a Forgotten Love". Not sure what this makes me think of, almost a love story during war times. Sounds drama rather than sci fi, or horror etc. Interested to see the log

crooked - It's Not You, It's Ryan

(or any other first name that will work. I haven't really settled on one).

A man who works at lost and found in an airport comes across a cellphone that belongs to his wife's lover. He digs deeper, only to find the man his wife is cheating with is a total weirdo, maybe even a stalker.

wasn't sold on the title. I liked the set up with a lost and found. Not sure how he knows the phones his wife's lover, but thats for you to work out. Could the person work at the airport, with a dark past - link it into his job as well. Maybe both he and his wife work at the airport and the lover is after the wife for some reason - e.g. importing weapons??

just thoughts.

Bflywings - Naughty Claws

A stuck up business woman mistakenly buys a stolen phone from a dodgy pawn shop and is suddenly thrust into the life of an unconventional Angel, where mischief and mayhem take their toll in her pursuit to achieve a set of wings.

not hows she mistakenly buys a phone from a pawn shop, but i like the idea that it comes from there. i agree, it sounds like comedy, even the title with the naughty element.

Quoted from Reef Dreamer

Mo -"Memories of a Forgotten Love". Not sure what this makes me think of, almost a love story during war times. Sounds drama rather than sci fi, or horror etc. Interested to see the log

Yeah, it's a drama like you first guessed. No war luckily because then I'd have to do a load of research! But it's a kind of love story. :)

Bill...Thanks on title...Thriller...and yes prolly a lil dark ...most of my work is rather 'dark' :) I dunno why :) I do write happy sappy rom/coms too on occasion :)

But look forward to a comedy in the bunch!

I'm seriously considering coming out of hiding for this. Even if I don't make the timelines, coming up with a believable and logical sequence of events for someone to purchase a phone that could cause trouble was quite easy (personal experience is the best teacher here). Blew it up into a thriller plot over the course of a few minutes.

Like I said, not sure how well I'd meet the time frames, but the idea could be worth finishing.

Quoted from M.Alexander

No title yet. Any suggestions?

Genre: Comedy/Action

Logline: After Satan's cell phone ends up in the hands of a couple stoners, all hell breaks loose as the forces of darkness come against them to get it back.

DARK FREQUENCY

Quoted from M.Alexander

Hell Phone.

Phil

Quoted from George Willson

Give it a shot George.

Phil

The Devil's Phonebook?

Quoted from M.Alexander

Satan on Line 2

Call from Hell

The Devil's Contacts

Dark Line

Sinister Contact

I'm sure there are a few others, but those are ones I just quickly pulled out of the air (i.e., my brain).

Quoted from M.Alexander

I'd say HELLPHONE.
But those darn French beat you to it with a teen comedy. ;D
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hellphone

How about? Hell Cell?

E.D.

Quoted from M.Alexander

What about a variation of...

A/The High/Higher/Highest Call/Calling

I like 'The highest call'.

As for the challenge itself, I have a very basic idea, I'm just not sure I could write a feature in 7 weeks. Or 6 and a half as it is now.

I don't have a title, but the logline will be something like...

A training martial artist accidentally buys an assasins phone and must figure out how to save the final target.

It would probably be martial arts, action, comedy.

I am in the middle of writing something else right now, but I had a couple of ideas that were milling around in my head that if I did write might revolve around something like:

Blown Connection

An American missionary in Israel is conned into buying a suspect phone by a terrorist, and his first use of it causes a massive explosion that not only kills the U.S. vice-president, but several key terrorist leaders.  Now he is on the run from terrorists, the Massad, and shady covert U.S. operatives, and only one person can save him--(still in development!!)

Off the Grid

When a geocaching fanatic receives a sat phone intended for drug smuggler, he discovers coded messages in the phone's memory that could lead to one of the greatest treasures known to man--but only if he can escape assassins sent by a Mexican drug lord to retrieve the phone.

By the way, geocaching is a treasure hunting game where you use a GPS to hide and seek containers with other participants in the activity.

Both are still rough works, and I can't decide which way to go.  The biggest challenge is just finding the time to write it all.

Gary

You're killing me, with the" no slapstick" rule, Phil :(

Mark

Quoted from M.Alexander

No title yet. Any suggestions?
Logline: After Satan's cell phone ends up in the hands of a couple stoners, all hell breaks loose as the forces of darkness come against them to get it back.

I like this one, as long as you keep it from being too similar to many other stoner movies. The "Satan" angle helps.

I got nothing for the title. I'm horrible at titles.

Quoted from ArtyDoubleYou

A training martial artist accidentally buys an assasins phone and must figure out how to save the final target.

I like this one. I don't really have much to say about it... Martial arts and assassins?!

Quoted from Gary in Houston

Blown Connection

This looks like it could work, but I worry you'll run into a lot of potential plot holes if you aren't careful. First: who would even want to sell him the cellphone in the first place? What's the motivation?

Not to mention you would have to do some research on the locations/etc. unless you're familiar with this kinda stuff already.

Quoted from Gary in Houston

Off the Grid

This one is decent, but aside from the geocaching angle (I didn't even know what that was before you told me), it's not that different than a lot of other ideas here.

My two cents.

Will

Quoted from irish eyes

You're killing me, with the" no slapstick" rule, Phil :(

I didn't say 'no slapstick.'

Phil

I always take pisstake for slapstick. :D

Mark

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Will, thanks for the feedback--I agree it would take a lot of research for something like that, which is why I might consider moving it instead to the U.S. and making the terrorists U.S. based. The motivation for selling it would be to shift blame to another person or organization. But that needs to be thought through. I may be unable to pull this off before the challenge ends, however.

I agree the other one probably needs a change of direction. I like the geocaching angle, because it's easy to incorporate the phone angle. Maybe the guy starts finding bodies--victims of a serial killer. That might be a little different.

Gary

Hawkeye

Blown connection - that looks complicated to pull off, but a decent basis of a political thriller

Off the grid - like the geocache angle, but the greatest treasure didn't seem to fit

M Alex - all I would say is that the title should really have the stoner element as this will drive the humour - it needs to sound like a comedy.

Quoted from Gary in Houston

I agree the other one probably needs a change of direction. I like the geocaching angle, because it's easy to incorporate the phone angle. Maybe the guy starts finding bodies--victims of a serial killer. That might be a little different.

The like the "average guy finding bodies" part. That's not something you see a lot in serial killer scripts.

M Alex

Hey ho, a few ideas...not good ones, but still

A devilish Call

When Satan's Engaged

Chill out Satan, or Cool it Satan

Or the obvious...

We stole the devils phone

When we stole the devils phone

Ok, none are good

Quoted from Reef Dreamer

Ok, none are good

;D ;D ;D

No, Bill, those aren't good, but I'm sure M appreciates all the help he can get.

Help please

I'm seriously running out of time and chances.

I'm going with my idea, Phone Buddy. What I could do with is example films where...

# A character or thing, animal, comes to life - by magic etc

# It turns into a buddy movie

# The characters clash like hell - chalk and cheese

# but it can't go on - ie not men who become mates, eg Planes trains automobiles

I feel as if there should hundreds of these but I can't think of the now - long day.

Thoughts

Can people team up if they want or is that a no-no?

Quoted from Dreamscale

;D ;D ;D

No, Bill, those aren't good, but I'm sure M appreciates all the help he can get.

Yeah, agreed - I'm tired. :( :( :(

I think you can team up. I mean we're helping each other with ideas.

Quoted from Reef Dreamer

Do these all have to be in one movie?

Quoted from Mr.Ripley

I think you can team up. I mean we're helping each other with ideas.

I mean like collaborate, co-write.

I still get random calls from L.A. on my cell phone from some guy trying to talk to me in Arabic. I've told them several times that I have no idea what they are saying and that they have the wrong guy. Course, they could be concerned about the fate of their missing compatriot and be tracking me to find his whereabouts. That would explain alot. True story.

Here's mine...

A Written Descent

Logline: A writer is stuck on what to put on the page until he finds inspiration after purchasing a cell phone that has pictures of grisly murders and an unknown killer.

Quoted from JamesTheJudged

A Written Descent

I think this could be cool. I like the idea of a writer becoming more and more deranged as he uses grisly pictures of a killer's victims for profit.

Thing is, writers generally aren't that interesting on screen unless you are one. I'm not saying not to use a writer... you can pull it off, but you have to make sure you're making him interesting enough for non-writers.

And, I'm unsure how he could get inspiration from pictures. You can find that kinda stuff online... besides, how would you base a script/book on some pictures of gore?

The general idea is good, it's just the motivation isn't really there yet.

Will

Quoted from JamesTheJudged

Ooooh, I rather like that idea... ;D

Quoted from crookedowl

Thing is, writers generally aren't that interesting on screen unless you are one. I'm not saying not to use a writer... you can pull it off, but you have to make sure you're making him interesting enough for non-writers.

And, I'm unsure how he could get inspiration from pictures. You can find that kinda stuff online... besides, how would you base a script/book on some pictures of gore?

I was thinking of the main character having family troubles because of poor sales on his only published book. The character is distancing himself because he feels he isn't good enough for the family, not being able to financially help them.

Also, hopefully the script will be able to evaluate whats in the pictures that make them so different ;D

Nothing useful, I just wanted to be reply number 100

Yeah for me :D

Mark

Quoted from JamesTheJudged

I like this but I would make the protag something other than a writer.

Make the killer the guy who finds the phone...he just doesn't remember it was his. Has blocked it out of his mind.

What's wrong with writing a writer? I was under the impression that if you can make the audience or reader care about the character then their career isn't going to be this blockade saying "I don't care about them because they don't have the same job as me." I'm just curious if someone can tell me the problem here. It's just that the fact he is a writer plays into the rest of the story I have planned and it affects the characters around him. Tell me why! :o

Quoted from M.Alexander

Kind of a take on "Lawnmower Man", "Virtuoisty" and "Damn You Bruce". .

Damn you, Bruce! Classic...pure classic! ;D ;D ;D

Also, this is the exact premise of our lil' friend Chuckie, as some may know. Child's Play to a T.

But that doesn't make it a bad thing.

Quoted from JamesTheJudged

#1 It's overused to have a writer protaganist. Think about how many stories there are about writers. IMDB lists 2011 entries searching on the keyword writer.

#2 It's cliche to have a writer solving a mystery think Murder, She Wrote or Castle to name two based on this premise.

Of course, if you want to write about a writer, I'm not going to stop you -- but I do think it's a mistake.

Hope that helps.

After I think of a good logline, I'm going to be sending the first 11 pages in, maybe even work on another script if I think I'll have the time to write it into a feature. 8)

Quoted from KevinLenihan

Make the killer the guy who finds the phone...he just doesn't remember it was his. Has blocked it out of his mind.

Actually a solid twist, I'd go with this but now everyone now knows what will happen. ;D

So, did anyone else got to listen to Rick Estley singing or that's already been discussed?

Quoted from khamanna

So, did anyone else got to listen to Rick Estley singing or that's already been discussed?

You have to love the classics! Even the mediocre ones.

Phil

Quoted from dogglebe

You have to love the classics! Even the mediocre ones.

Phil

Oh, I know Rick Estley! I didn't know a word of English back then and all I could get was:
Enne goreh cant you now
Enne goreh cant you aaaaa
(seriously - that's what we kids were singing)

Turns out - I still don't get what he's saying there.

Actually, you got it right.

Phil

I also fell for the rickroll. And yes, it also took me about 8 clicks until I realized how to get out of the page. The shame :-/ Here's the idea I'm working on:

Bad Connection

A young woman's world becomes a living nightmare when she inadvertently buys a stolen cell phone that contains videos of brutal murders, and its original owner comes looking for his property.

Thought I wouldn't come up with anything...nuts.

Title: Contract List

Logline: A retired hitman intercepts his replacement's list of targets to use as evidence, making him the biggest target in town.

The logline needs work, but there you go. Wonder if I can write the pages before the Friday deadline.

Phone Home

A pickpocket finds himself embroiled in an invasion plot when he lifts an unusual looking cell phone from an undercover extraterrestrial.

Here's my thought thus far:

A pair of bungling, socially inept losers intercept a mind-controlling cell phone intended for use by a deadly and beautiful international assassin...

Action/Comedy

Like the line of thought discussed about the acquired cell phones containing pictures...a lot of potential there for deception (can't believe everything one see's in photos) and general chaos from interpreting information out of context.

There's also the possiblity of all kinds of incriminating evidences showing up, from celebrity affairs to gangster assaults and the like -evidence that people would kill to keep from showing up in the light of day.

The alien phone could be fun as the hero unravels the secrets of not only the phone, but the aliens and thier devious intentions.

When we do these 7WC, we are less picky about sticking EXACTLY to the challenge assignment. If you have a great idea where a cell phone is a big part of the story and then you write a great script around it, people will admire your work and be happy for you. No one is going to say you FAILED. It's not a contest, remember? Anyone who can crank out a decent feature in 7 weeks is a winner here.

Also, for those who don't know, my 7WC Blackout was picked up from here and will be released on various VOD platforms in May. In other words, it's better to write a GREAT script that interests filmmakers than worry too much about winning the readers choice for sticking closest to the challenge...which we usually don't have readers choice for these feature challenges anyway.

Quoted from M.Alexander

Title: Killphone

Genre:  Horror

So there's this guy who's a Verizon Wireless employee by day and serial killer by night.  Police catch onto him, try to accost while he's at work, he brandishes a dagger and they shoot him.  Turns out this guy's into Black Magic and right before he takes his last breath he utters a spell  and his spirit enters into a Droid X2 smartphone in a display case.

Next day, a college dude buys the posessed cell phone, and then anybody he calls ends up getting murdered by the serial killers' ghost or whatever.  Kind of a take on "Lawnmower Man", "Virtuoisty" and "Damn You Bruce".

I'm not gonna write it, but if somebody else is hurting for an idea be my guest

.

Why don't you want to write it? You write it and I'll read it. Howz that? I think it's a good one.

I don't know if my logline is going to stick in place or not, but I have the first ten and it feels like it works so far.

Title: Enter Your Problem

Logline: A long time employee in sound technologies dares to quit his company when he learns that his smart phone and life are better off in the hands of a dead man.

Sandra

Quoted from M.Alexander

Uhhh, not to be a stickler, but the logline clearly states the cell phone must be purchased.

A man/woman's life is turned upside down after purchasing a smart phone that is supposed to go to someone else.

Sorry, Mr. Cornetto, it's a great logline, but it ain't gonna fly. :P

One of the definitions of purchase is

To acquire by effort; earn

which most certainly fits in with a pickpocket lifting a cellphone from a person on the street.

So, no problem there.

Quoted from mcornetto

One of the definitions of purchase is

To acquire by effort; earn

which most certainly fits in with a pickpocket lifting a cellphone from a person on the street.

So, no problem there.

It's a thin line. Purchasing compared to stealing. Yes, you can earn something by stealing, but if it came down to the wire where judges were doing their judgeramma thing, and if all things were equal between a few scripts, they might pass on it unless the story was superior. In the end though, story rules; not rules.

Sandra

While I kept track of the thread, I can see why folks are choosing to pass.
I'm not feeling this either.

I'm already struggling with a cliched plot request
*and* a potential project on the side.

I still might squeak in, but alas, if there's no passion to it there ain't no juice.

So far we have:

1. Will
2. Bill
3. Chris(?)
4. Dena
5. bflywings
6. M.Alexander(?)
7. George(?)
8. ArtyDoubleYou
9. Gary
10. Jeff's pisser(?)
11. reaper550 (?)
12. James
13. Steve
14. Rene
15. Michael
16. Blakkwolfe
17. Sandra

I think that's everyone. Did I miss anyone?

Assuming we all enter and finish the scripts, we should (hopefully) get 17 critiques on our features + a few from those incredibly nice people who read the scripts regardless of whether they entered or not.

Yeah I'm in...not sure how cliche these are going to all feel. My phone isn't going to be purchased so maybe I'm breaking the rules a little. I never colored inside of the lines. I hope some others will stray just a tad to give us a wider range of creative scripts so it won't be like when we were all reading that last challenge.

I'm in.. a comedy(shocking)

:)

Mark

No, no pisser from me. I'm way out.

I don't think I'll have time to read any, either, sorry to say.

Looks like a great turnout, though, which really surprises me. I'll be surprised even more if half of the peeps on the list actually complete a 7WC. But then again, it would also surprise me if Dena writes less than 4 scripts in those 7 weeks.

Word of the day - "surprise"

Quoted from nawazm11

I'm not going to make the first part of the challenge, still developing the idea and my wife's playing virtual assistant for a producer which requires the computer. Count me out of this one, sorry if I got your hopes up. ;)

Don't count me in just yet. I'm still thinking about it.

Right now my full attention is on the ScreamCraft Competition.

I might - and I said might - jump in this last minute.

I don't feel like it'll be my best work, because I'm not that into the concept.

But I'll try my best if I enter.

8)

I'm busy with a rewrite of another feature, but just like Dena, I'm a sucker for a challenge! Don't count me in or out yet. I have a title. Dead Ringer...yes it will be either a horror or thriller. 8)

Quoted from nawazm11

Assuming we all enter and finish the scripts, we should (hopefully) get 17 critiques on our features + a few from those incredibly nice people who read the scripts regardless of whether they entered or not.

I don't think everyone will have time to read 17 features...

Sorry - I'm out.

My week has been thrown into turmoil and its no longer realistic. Besides, my phone script was niggling me. I had a couple of great scenes in mind but I just haven't had the head space to take this forward.

Shame.

I still remain happy to give input to others and will turn my attention in the few weeks to my 14th gland idea.

Okay, who here hasn't written any pages yet?

I'm still in. I feel a little obligated now (a good thing), but I know I'm running out of time. I think I'll change ideas. I struggled through three pages last night and my current idea isn't working.

I can still do this....

I'm done with 10...but it's vomit puke upchuck...gotta sweep and mop tomorrow...

ONLY writing one this challenge...swear!

I'm not aiming for anything for this Friday. I had the 7WC in mind.

Quoted from Pale Yellow

I'm done with 10...but it's vomit puke upchuck...gotta sweep and mop tomorrow...

You got two days to tighten it up a bit.

Phil

I will do....it will be less painful to the readers that way...now where did I put my cleaning cart????

Quoted from Pale Yellow

I will do....it will be less painful to the readers that way...now where did I put my cleaning cart????

Oh my, I cleaned my page one and there's nothing left! ;D

Sandra

I'll try and read as many as I can, time permitting.

I've written the ten pages (yes I did go with a writer, I really hope the script will be able to work well with the character) but I need to think of a better logline. My last one did give the main idea but it didn't present the family descent that also happens.

Title: A Written Descent

Quoted from JamesTheJudged

I understand what Michael's saying, but I think things run in cycles. Even if it's overdone at present, it might work later on. Or, on the other hand, your spin might be perfect.

BTW, I love the title.

Sandra

Quoted from Sandra Elstree.

Wow, I didn't think about cycles but it's true for a lot of things. Also I'm happy the title is good! ;D

Quoted from Grandma Bear

I don't think everyone will have time to read 17 features...

One can only hope... ;D

I'll read them all, or at least the first acts. Depends on whether or not the writer is a contributing member... and if they've at least read a few other entries.

ALSO, I'm psyched now because I think I finally have something good. A good idea, at least. No pages. I need to stop procrastinating. Starting now.....

I can't promise any reads this weekend... ST PADDY"S weekend peeps :D:D

Mark

Yay - 19 pgs done!

Nawazm11 and Ghostie: Yep, Naughty Claus (changed the title) is going to be a comedy. My first comedy - hopefully it's funny, if not - sorry.

Ghostie: run with the pawn shop if you can use it. It's a very minor part in my story. I also thought I might be able to do another story where someone finds a phone in a storage unit they bought at the auctions. Not gonna have time to do though, so your welcome to it if you want.

Sounds like some good stories are coming out. Is there a time frame for reading them? Cause I'm a very slow reader. It's gonna take me ages to get through all of them.

Plus - do the first 9-12 pages have to stay the exact same? Cause I have a habit of going over and over things and rewriting them. They might change a thousand times before the seven weeks are up - storline will stay the same though.

Renee

A Written Descent

Updated Logline: A writer is stuck on what to put on the page until he finds inspiration after purchasing a cell phone containing pictures of grisly murders and an unknown killer that leads to his family life and his sanity spiraling out of control.

Quoted from crookedowl

I'll read them all, or at least the first acts. Depends on whether or not the writer is a contributing member... and if they've at least read a few other entries.

I'll definitely be looking for this.

Phil

Well, I've written nine pages. I didn't go with either of my original ideas. And it's definitely a vomit draft. And if people were in the same room with me when they read it, they would be throwing sharp objects in my direction. BUT, at least I wrote something!

Quoted from Gary in Houston

Sounds like mine.

This should be fun...

Quoted from RJ

Sounds like some good stories are coming out. Is there a time frame for reading them? Cause I'm a very slow reader. It's gonna take me ages to get through all of them.
Renee

I'm weird with the reading. I can sometimes read fast, but sometimes I'm very slow. I don't know what it is with me. It might be my editor's eye.

I would like to read all 17 (if there are 17) if possible because I just don't feel right in my conscience if I don't. That's not to say I wouldn't skim some if necessary, but I only feel it's right to provide something useful as feedback that is real to me and might help the author. I hate the idea of giving something a five and dime treatment. I'm just not built that way. Makes me a lousy business person, I know.

I do feel that this is a wide open theme with loads of room for imagination. The fun will be in studying the scripts that are conjured.

I'm looking forward to the challenge whether I suck the big banana or not. The people here will provide more than enough energy, I'm sure.

Sandra

My title...

My Mermaid, My Meat

Some random dude meets a really smoking hot Mermaid while hanging out in some ocean and falls in love with her assets, only to discover he's not the only one when she sells him her shell phone for a sample of his meat.

NC17 drama mystery horror slasher comedy action adventure - script contains numerous examples of unfilmables, unnecessary nudity and violence, and one Hell of smoking hot Mermaid, who likes to play.

Quoted from Dreamscale

I see you received my ether waves. :)

It was a consideration to include the mythic sirens in my script, but they didn't have enough sex appeal-- half bird and all.

Mermaids are much more seductive. Mermaid sirens then. I'm waiting...

Sandra

I love Mermaids! They rock. The Mermaid in My Mermaid, My Meat is very hot but also very goofy and...well...kinda like Darryl Hannah's portrayal of that Mermaid in that old Tom Hanks Mermaid movie.

But My Mermaid, My Meat's Mermaid is hotter, shorter (Darryl Hannah is kind of a sasquatch when her hair is all big), and more sexually attractive (to all sexes including asexuals) and promiscuous, in a silly, natural, more down to the sea way, and funny also.

I hope at least. She just wants to be loved.

Quoted from JC Cleveland

My Meat is very hot but also very goofy

You should get that checked out :D

Mark

Quoted from Dreamscale

(Darryl Hannah is kind of a sasquatch when her hair is all big),

Don't tell me tall women intimidate you Jeff?

Even a tall tree can be climbed when it's knocked . . .

Quoted from Eoin

Don't tell me tall women intimidate you Jeff?

No, they don't. I'm tall, but I prefer shorter chickies. Perfect height for me is around 5'-1" to 5'-5". I'm around 6'-2".

So when I intro the Mermaid in My Mermaid, My Meat as being 5'-2', please understand why the exact height must be stated, as it will come into play later in the script in a daring escape from a local marine water park involving several Orcas, dolphins, and penguins.

Quoted from Dreamscale

The penguins pick the lock to a Mini Cooper with the Dolphin's nose and the Orca acts as the getaway driver . . .

Quoted from Eoin

The penguins pick the lock to a Mini Cooper with the Dolphin's nose and the Orca acts as the getaway driver . . .

;D ;D ;D ;D Damn, Eoin, that's funny. I can't stop laughing. That would be wonderful in a big old pisser.

Nice!!!

Well, I'm out. I tried to get something together last night, but... yeah. I'm still looking forward to reading the entries, though.

I do have another project (plus a bunch of ideas) at the moment, so I'll probably have something up soon, anyway.

Oh well...

Quoted from M.Alexander

Sorry, crookedowl, but once you exceed 10 posts on a WC thread there's no backing out. It's pretty much the same as signing your name in blood. If you bail now it's equivalent to mutiny and punishable by law. You'll be terribly ostricized and forever known as crooked ostrich". It's a rule.

Of course they don't tell us these things before we start. Gotta read the small print.

Dammit!! Not again!

Quoted from crookedowl

I asked earlier if it would be OK if we could co-write scripts together for this.

No one got back to me.

I mean, if we could, I wouldn't mind throwing something together with ya last minute if you really want to enter.

If it's allowed, of course.

I'm still contemplating entering, honestly, and am going back and forth.

Don't know what to do.

Quoted from Guest

I mean, if we could, I wouldn't mind throwing something together with ya last minute if you really want to enter.

Yeah, that would be great... Do you have any ideas?

I don't see why it wouldn't be allowed. It's not a contest or anything.

Alright dude - fuck it - we can do this shit. haha

You wanna carry on in PM's or what? Let me know.

Quoted from Guest

I asked earlier if it would be OK if we could co-write scripts together for this.

No one got back to me.

I've written 11 pages. If you could write the last 90 or so pages, I would be good with that.

Quoted from crookedowl

Dude, you could piss the first ten pages. Knock it out, the next 90 will write themselves.

Don

Quoted from M.Alexander

A writer is thrust into a deadly game of cat-and-mouse after he aqcuires a killer's cell phone containing damning evidence.

Or "incriminating evidence".   I'll even be so bold as to suggest a title change: "Incrimination" or "Incriminating Evidence"

My 2$  worth

http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-babzbuzz/m-1296405843/s-new/

I may consider that for a future project (of course if that would be fine with you), seems like it could be excellent, but with what I've focused on I've been aiming for a more Horror/Mystery then Crime/Mystery with Horror elements.

Quoted from Don

Dude, you could p*ss the first ten pages. Knock it out, the next 90 will write themselves.

So you're saying we only have to write 10 pages and by April 26th, I'll have a feature without penning another word... sweet :D

This modern technology is amazing :D

Mark

Quoted from M.Alexander

Actually that was my loose translation and a condensed version of your previous logline. In other words all I was saying it seems a bit wordy and could be edited down a bit more. Check out that link for Babz Buzz concerning loglines.

How about this, I'm not to sure:
A writer finds inspiration in a phone containing pictures of grisly murders and an unknown killer that leads to his family life and his sanity spiraling out of control.
OR
A writers life and sanity begin to spiral out of control when he finds pictures in a phone of grisly murders and an unknown killer.

I don't know why I like using the word "grisly" so much.

Quoted from M.Alexander

Criminy. Not sure if I'm gonna make the deadline. I went all Robotard 8000 on my script thinking I was being funny and clever. After rereading it I can see now it's a product of way too much caffeine. I'm basically back to ground zero and slightly traumatized.

I don't drink much coffee anymore, but I much as you re-wrote the ten pages I started with.

We'll see tomorrow after I red line it again.

It seems that often scripts have a mind of their own and whatever it is they're saying, a person just needs to put up with it until some glorious resurrection of the dead takes place. Waiting for that.

Sandra

11 and a half pages submitted

All wrote on one night... never a good sign :D

Mark

Hows everyone doing?

So I'm about to submit my draft and noticed that the contest calls for you NOT to put your real name on the submission. I was under the impression that everyone was not hiding their entry based on the fact that everyone has been sharing their ideas. I'm fine with whatever is decided, but I guess I want to make sure I'm doing it right, as this is the first one I've entered and I'm traveling all day tomorrow.

What say you, Phil? Real name on it or not?

Gary

Fuck, please say hide your name.

I don't want my name on this atrocity I came up with. haha

Had to look close through all that other stuff in Phil's original post but here it is:

Unlike previous challenges, this one will not be anonymous. Your names will be on your work from the get-go;

Yeah, usually previous OWC's are anonymous hence the "no real name" next to the submission. For this, like James pointed out, write your name. :)

For the past couple of years I think only the October OWC has been anonymous the rest have had names on the scripts.

My thriller idea is coming together little by little (as I distract myself from three novels I should really work on). I have a basic plot, but no MacGuffin. My outline still says "MacGuffin (I'll think of this later)". Fortunately, I still don't really need to know what it is to write 11 pages.

Submitted! And may God have mercy on anyone who actually reads this script (and the logline quickly prepared so I could submit this)!

Now, as punishment, I must get in a car and drive for 14 hours. With kids.

Good luck Gary and also for your script :D

Mark

Quoted from Gary in Houston

Yup, you deserve a read for this alone - cant think of much worse.

May the force be with you.

Quoted from JamesTheJudged

Had to look close through all that other stuff in Phil's original post but here it is:

Unlike previous challenges, this one will not be anonymous. Your names will be on your work from the get-go;

Love your avatar, James. My name might as well be on mine. I can run, but I can't hide.

I've just submitted the first 11. Well, here we go... If you need care and counseling, just call 1-800 I give up. If allz you get is a machine, PM me.

Sandra

Be easy on me - I can do sooo much better. lol

Noticing some peeps beating themselves up already, before their script is even seen.

Just remember that you entered the OWC and that in itself is an accomplishment. Nothing that you wrote was set in stone, so make the best of your feedback and rewrite if needed.

Well done to all who entered.

Mark

Following Mark, this contest is to help you write and finish a screenplay. Be lucky that it's a feature. IMO, it has more value than a short. That's just me (since I suck writing shorts...lol).

Anyway I digress, back to the matter at hand. Like Mark says, you can rewrite it afterwards once you get a satisfactory number of notes from peeps on here. Once it's all done, you'll have a feature under your belt that can be found and made into a movie (it happened to Pia).

Everyone's good in my book. Reaper gets a bit more for that Danielle Harris pic. :). lol.

Gabe

I slammed out the first 10 pages as quick as I could.

I don't know if crookedowl wants to give it a quick rewrite or just submit what we have.

I have a beef and beer to go to in exactly a half hour and I won't be back until way after the deadline.

So....don't know what to do, guys. ??)

Don't sweat it. Everyone's going to have a bad first draft.

It's not that. I haven't heard from him since late last night.

I don't know what he wants to do with that 10 before we submit.

I'm going to be out past the deadline, so, I don't know...

I guess I should just submit it then? Maybe he won't make it online fast enough tonight?

lol I dont know.

Go ahead and submit it Reaper...no worries. It's just a vomit of the first ten. Nobody's is going to be perfect. I'm right there with you on typing out fast. That's the way I do everything :) so usually my work is crapppp the first go around.

We will all help each other with notes. :)

And on that note...I just submitted my crap script! :) Happy Friday to all you writers!

d

I guess. You can always work on it and submit it after the contest. That's what I did with DE.

Submitting it now! Sorry!!

See. Don't sweat it.

I just finished the first 10 pages and man it's a p**ser. Not good at all. Like trying to talk to the pretty girl at the bar, I'm going to need some liquid courage to send this crap in. lol.

Dirk

Submit it anyway. Based on some recent posts, I don't think you'll have anything to worry about...

Liquid courage in your honor, Dirk! Cheers!

Quoted from Blakkwolfe

Liquid courage in your honor, Dirk! Cheers!

Thanks Blakkwolfe. I'm on the dance floor and I have eye contact with the pretty girl. Liquid courage kicking in. My move.

Okay, it's in. God help me. Not a fan of the script but who knows maybe one of you fellow writers may like it. Either way, best of luck to everyone.

Dirk

You got a little more than fifteen minutes, folks, to submit your first ten pages.

submit here: http://www.simplyscripts.com/unpro_short_exercise_13_03.html

Phil

Quoted from dogglebe

You got a little more than fifteen minutes, folks, to submit your first ten pages.

submit here: http://www.simplyscripts.com/unpro_short_exercise_13_03.html

Phil

Isn't there still 45 minutes left? Or am I looking at the wrong time?

The 1WC ends and so the 6WC begins...

Damn, peeps...sounds like s serious bunch of shit. For reals? Glad I said I wouldn't be reading any of these.

Sorry, but this sounds pathetic...

Well I will be...

Well done to those who entered. No one expects a perfect script, the question is, to me anyway, would I wish to read more?

Quoted from Dreamscale

Damn, peeps...sounds like s serious bunch of shit. For reals? Glad I said I wouldn't be reading any of these.

Sorry, but this sounds pathetic...

Boy I'm glad I didn't get mine in on time. The Abominable Dreamscale's on the loose! :o

8)

Congrats to those participating. If I could jump in for the 6wc, I might. But time is tight. I'll try to read everything as it helps me as well (are these posted yet?). I know it's not perfect, but as long as it hits the basics (opening image to set tone, something to hook the reader in first ten, scenes with 'layers', etc), you'll be fine. I'm a big believer in vomit drafts that has back bone and that requires multiple surgeries/jolts of lightning.

Quoted from Dreamscale

Damn, peeps...sounds like s serious bunch of shit. For reals? Glad I said I wouldn't be reading any of these.

Sorry, but this sounds pathetic...

Dude, what? ;D

Am I missing something here?

Quoted from nawazm11

Dude, what? ;D

Am I missing something here?

I think I know what he means. The way everyone is talking about how horrible their scripts are, doesn't exactly make us potential readers excited about your scripts.

I also think it was a bad idea to post the first 10 pages of your 7WC feature here. Why? Because if your first 10 pages truly sucks here. Who's going to want to go back and read your feature when you post it. Just saying...

Quoted from Grandma Bear

Thank you Pia. You are 100% correct.

Sorry, peeps if I offended anyone. Very, VERY hammied last night!!!! Absolutely crazy night!

Quoted from Grandma Bear

Pia and Jeff,

That's my fault. I'm one of the peeps who posted that I wasn't happy with my script. Just the opposite, I love my sript. Saying that, I know that my script was written in a weeks time and it's going to have its problems and I still have 6 weeks to go but I always get nervous when someone reads something of mine and I can feel my anxiety kicking in. So sorry to you guys and to others who read my posts. + I was a little drunk last night but that's no excuse.

Dirk

Everyone's not going to be happy with their 1st 10 pages. But, you can always rewrite it. :)

Gabe

Quoted from DV44

Hey Dirk, I don't see what the issue was.

Everyone of these has writers spouting off how they don't like their script, think its rushed, could be better, hate themselves etc etc

The reverse logic says that if I promote my script it will be better?

Besides, the first ten of a feature is a greater challenge, IMO, than a short. This is a site for learning, so lets do exactly that - except I bailed out of course, but I will read.

Looking forward to seeing these highly flawed scripts.

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