The Badest by Latunde Tomiwa Titus - Short, Action, Crime - Tayo travels abroad in search of a survival but only to unravel the death of his father. 13 pages - pdf, format 8)

A comment on this script would me gladly recieved. Thanks- Author

'I' before 'E', except after 'C'

I did read through this script a while ago and thought it was badly written... it is also childishly contrived which may mean you are actually a child so I didn't want to put you off. To correct all of your errors would probably take 2 years of study into the English language. Read lots of English novels. This will not only improve your grammar and vocabulary but will also give you an idea of how stories work.

Also, you should always stick to what you know. Write from experience. Also consider what it is that you can share with us that we don't already know. Maybe a foreign experience?