MatchStick by Meemo Prasad - Short, Horror - In the building of the ghost, the matchstick is prohibited. 3 pages - pdf, format 8)

Hi there,

So obviously English isn't your first language, so I'd suggest maybe trying to find a script partner if you want your work to be made in USA etc.

I read it though and I like the idea of the match only illuminating a certain area of his surroundings etc but I think the end is a little too obvious - has promise though.

If you'd like some help re-writing it let me know - anthony@anthonycawood.co.uk

Fair play Anthony. I read it earlier but didn't know what to say.

Be careful of working with others though, as you may find you end up doing it all yourself and sharing half the credit.

I hear you Dustin
I almost didn't post but figured I'd give it a go and given it's only a 3 page short I thought I'd extend the olive branch.
If he takes me up on the offer it'll be my first collaboration, live and learn right?

Anthony

I can't of anything to add other than BOO!

There's little story here for me. And we don't know if he's a theif - the way I read it he's just a man running away from four other men - that doesn't make him a thief.
He's running away and he gets caught - I would want a bit more.