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Posted by: Don, June 7th, 2014, 11:12am
Age of Shadows by Lee Cordner - Action, Adventure, Fantasy - A Huntsman and a Warrior join forces to stop a relentless demon from unleashing an ancient evil upon the world.  108 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: CalebHart (Guest), June 7th, 2014, 4:22pm; Reply: 1
I've always hated these Dungeons and Dragons-type stories, but I gotta admit this script is expertly written so far.   Sorry to say I only made it to page ten, but that's no fault of your own.  It's just not my cup of tea.  But best of luck with it though.  I'm gonna breeze through the rest of it at some point in time just to study your writing style.
Posted by: Demento, June 7th, 2014, 4:50pm; Reply: 2
I have to ask. How many scripts have you written Lee and how much time does it take you to write one?
Posted by: Demento, June 7th, 2014, 5:59pm; Reply: 3

Quoted from Leegion
Demento, I have no clue how many I've written, lol.  If I were to guestimate, I'd say around 70 with multiple revisions, fan scripts, originals, etc.  (I'd list them all, but you guys have seen most of them, you haven't seen the fan scripts)

A script takes me anywhere from 4 - 15 days to write depending on my mood.  This one is an adaptation of my novel, so I pretty much had it planned out.

-Lee


Impressive stuff. Keep it up. It's like every week I see a new script of yours pop up around here.
Posted by: Toby_E, June 8th, 2014, 5:35am; Reply: 4
Lee,

I must say that I am mighty impressed with your work ethic. If I write anything more than two features a year than that year has been a success for me!

That being said, this script isn't really my cup of tea, but if you have anything else that you would like me to read, I will do so later this week.

Let me know, mate.
Posted by: c m hall, June 8th, 2014, 10:40am; Reply: 5
This is an amazing script, considering the epic nature of the story I think the writing is wonderfully precise and vivid.  The story is exhausting but exhilarating, the changes that the main characters undergo keep the fight scenes from becoming tedious to read.  
Dialogue in a mythic adventure is probably always the weakest element -- but I think it works pretty well here, I made a note that page 99, Maralda's dialogue bits were especially good.

There's so much action and so much, well, everything, that I probably stumbled through parts of the story but I'm going to draw your attention to page 75, Draagon kicks Brisburn through a wall -- maybe an error, I didn't think Brisburn was in that scene.
Also, on page 76, I guess that "tries toe scape" should be "tries to escape" but I wouldn't put anything past the characters in this story.

I expect that this would make a marvelous, very successful film.  
Posted by: Toby_E, June 8th, 2014, 5:02pm; Reply: 6
Lee,

The Last Sundown sounds right up my street. If you want a pair of eyes to look over it before you post it, email it other when it's finished. Otherwise I'll just check it when you post it up.

T.
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