Siren by Allen Wolf - Short, Thriller - A young woman meets a young man who changes her life forever.  34 pages - pdf, format 8)

A couple of things:

You need to do some simple formatting changes.

INT. APARTMENT BUILDING - STAIRWELL

SUPER: LONDON, ENGLAND 1976

SOL (age, description) has an action.

MRS LADY (age, description) has an action.

This may help with the length. 34 pages is a bit long for a short, but not long enough for a feature.

The logline is really generic. What kind of characters are these? What's at stake?