These Empty Streets by Andrew Rodriguez - Short, Horror - After a night of partying, two friends stumble upon a gruesome scene in the middle of an empty street. 9 pages - pdf, format 8)

I'm not one for horror, but I enjoyed this even though there are a few issues.

There is spelling errors throughout the script, a few of them looks like you tried to spell two words at once.

In the first bit of action you tell us two times that the lamp posts are giving off a harsh light... a few action lines down you say "He is dragging a woman. He’s dragging her the ankle of one..." besides the clear error you can just simply say that he is dragging her by one of her ankles, we'll get the picture. The last scene on age 7 you explain that the tall man is walking slowly twice.

Maybe I'm missing something but I don't understand what happens on page 4...when Luke grabs Sarah, points to the body and she screams. Why are they all of a sudden shocked at  the body again? Seems like they forgot about it somehow.

Also you do not need to capitalize the characters names throughout the entire script, only when they are first mentioned.

I liked the last scene, had a chuckle out of that.

This scripts seems alright to me, just need to patch some stuff up.

Your first paragraph is overwritten. I'll edit it down, not add anything.  

Ext. street - night

Deserted. Three lampposts cast a harsh glow for only a short circumference. - This still gets your point across.

The man dragging the woman is CREEPY!

You don't need to capitalize the character's name every time you mention them. Just the first time we meet them.

Dude. You. are. scaring. the SHIT OUT OF ME! Why are her eye open now?! lol! Awesome!!

I saw the ending coming.

Okay, although the tall man's character was creepy, the script needs a page one rewrite. Don't give us camera angels. Luke's action were completely unrealistic to the point where if I were watching this on youtube I would click to the next video, especially when he felt for the girl's pulse.

You said her eyes were now open, it made me believe they were closed at first and that she was maybe willingly allowing this man to carry her around like this. That would have been creepy and interesting.

You should really study more scripts. You put way too much detail. This script could have been 3 or 4 pages.

Andrew,

Comments can sometimes horrify.  If these help thank the stars.

This was a good read, although it would have been better if you hadn't made the couple so stupid.  Or made the man smarter.  the couple seems too dumb for words, and dumb characters are not compelling.

I think you give too many directions.  You might be better off working on story elements and characters.  

Best
Richard