Portal to Hell by Reynaldo Reyes - Horror - When a flaming demon steps through a portal in the teenage Reynaldo Reyes's living room in Brooklyn, N.Y. and in Tampa, Florida it's just the first of a series of frightening encounters and unexplained deaths, including that of the well-known rapper Jam Master Jay of Run DMC.  This is the bizarre true story of a life-long struggle with the supernatural/horror. 114 pages - pdf, format 8)

Read the first few pages. Type-os and format issues and the story with the narrative voice over aren't doing anything for me. Nothing pulls me in. I read the logline/summary and went online to see what the true story is so I'm thinking you are the same guy I found online that already made a movie with this title?

Your premise looks and sounds unfocused, which could be precursor to the actually script. Whether it's the case or not, the premise is a readers first impression.

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