A Girl And Her Angel by Felix Hockey - Short, Drama - Set in London in the 1950s. A homeless girl wakes up in a room and is told that she died and is now in heaven. 9 pages - pdf, format 8)

Hey Felix, a few thoughts, just my opinion of course.

1) I can't really see anything that shows we're in 50s London, or any real reason it needs setting there?
2) The intro seems too short, not enough set up to her poverty and desperation.
3) Some of the dialogue seems a little OTN and inrealistic, especially for Sarah.
4) The ending seemed a little obvious and not the best way to go... I wonder if you've considered her returning to her captvity as an ending - afterall, it's warm, she has clothes, food etc? Just a thought

But I think there's something here with this one, just needs a little tlc.

Anthony