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Posted by: Don, January 20th, 2016, 7:01pm
Things Change by David Dogman Harvey - Comedy - A man and his wife take in his eccentric and elderly father and move next door to the neighbors from Hell.  The neighbor's abuse takes its toll on the couple so the man seeks his own form of justice and revenge before they move. 103 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: Brett, February 17th, 2016, 2:14pm; Reply: 1
I've read the first twenty pages and my main observation would be that it feels stiff. What amounts to twenty pages of exposition without any real character development. The conversation between the sibs felt way too casual. That's a time grudges and debts come screaming to the fore. They'd also have rude and/or cruel nicknames for each other. Make me believe these people are wrapped up in each other's lives.
Good luck.
Posted by: Dustin, February 17th, 2016, 7:20pm; Reply: 2

Quoted from Brett
I've read the first twenty pages and my main observation would be that it feels stiff.


Sounds like this could be a good one... particularly the first 20 pages.
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