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Posted by: Don, March 2nd, 2016, 11:52pm
Nostalgia by Garfield Whyte - Drama - When two best friends from an all-boys boarding high school run into each other 25 year later in an airport departure lounge, the wife of one felt compelled to take a back seat and change her flight plans. Don’t assume as it’s not what you are thinking. 99 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: Garfield, March 6th, 2016, 9:37pm; Reply: 1
Inviting you to give me a feedback on this all boys boarding school drama
Posted by: BSaunders, March 10th, 2016, 6:46am; Reply: 2
Your description is good, quick and easy to read.

But there is too much dialogue. I got 10 pages in and all it was, was two guys talking about high school in a strange manner.

My first couple of scripts I got drilled for having too much dialogue and I only had about 6 pages. I skimmed through yours and it is just mostly just that.. dialogue.

I'm no professional, but it would probably work better as a play. The interesting choice of words and character could make fun on stage but not on film.

Who knows. You very may well be the next Tarantino. Keep at it.
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