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Posted by: Don, June 2nd, 2016, 8:19am
Party Mom by David M Troop - Short, Comedy - How do you keep a drunken, over-aged party girl from ruining your tenth birthday party - especially when it's your own mother? 7 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: khamanna, June 2nd, 2016, 10:43am; Reply: 1
Lol, Dave.
I know these party moms.
You know what else she can do - she can go head down on the slide when everyone goes feet first.
Once my mother tries a water slide and an aid (you know those who stand up there making sure people maintain distance when sliding down on those tube - security or smthing) asked her if she wants to go head down. My mother doesn't know a word of English but she got very excited seeing someone is talking to her so she said "Yes, yes" And she went head down to my great distress - see I didn't have time to stop her, the girl already turned the tube - and at the bottom she did a flip over and almost broke her neck. She's not a small woman or close to being thin... Anyway, your mother can go head down and do a flip over.

I didn't like her boobies remark. She's not mean, just a party person after all.
Posted by: RichardR, June 2nd, 2016, 11:14am; Reply: 2
Dave

Some notes.

Party moms are well known to most of us.  And they will try all the games and try to hog the spotlight.  So, this story rings true.  And they do embarrass their children.  Good job.  I'm not sure you need to make her a drunk because that sort of gives her an excuse, and she doesn't need one.  She's just the party mom.  Good read.

best
Richard
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