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Posted by: Don, June 3rd, 2016, 9:01am
Tomorrow's News by Patrick Wijsman - Short, Mystery - A self neglected man falls in love with an anchorwoman who lives one day ahead of him. - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: cloroxmartini, June 3rd, 2016, 9:53am; Reply: 1
Interesting fantasy. Don't have much to say about it.
Posted by: eldave1, June 3rd, 2016, 6:37pm; Reply: 2
Not a bad job. One false note for sure when one cop is asking another cop do you want a warrant. They probably already have one if they are searching his apartment. Better to say put out an APB
Posted by: RichardR, June 6th, 2016, 6:42am; Reply: 3
Patrick,
Some notes.
I like the idea that he has some insight to tomorrow via the beautiful announcer. I think you might consider not making him a criminal. If she can feed him financial info, he can make enough money to woo her. Or he can become a hero by saving the day on a disaster. Either way, he comes off as more likeable. In cay case, nice job.
Best
Richard
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