Life These Days by Tony Kiszewski - Sci Fi, Fantasy - In dystopic 2099 America, where music is the realm of the artificially intelligent and the National Park Service has become a branch of the Armed Forces, an aspiring musician/ranger goes AWOL after a denied leave request threatens to derail his dreams. 91 pages - pdf, format 8)

Tony,

Log intrigued me so I took a look to about page 12. Not really sure what to make of this. A little too chit-chatty for me. Is this a serious story? I mean, it's not badly written at all, just think itreads 'weird' if you get my drift.

See if you're around before checking out the rest.

Sorry I didn't respond right away. First, I didn't realize my script was posted and would show up in this forum. And then I didn't have an account so could not sign in.

If you mean whether I'm seriously pursuing a second career writing screenplays, the answer would be no.  I am serious about telling a good story, whether or not it ever finds an audience. If you mean serious as in not a comedy, yes.  I'm not writing this for laughs even through a little black humor might seep in from time to time.

And the chattiness is a problem, I agree, but I couldn't figure out how else to introduce the characters and set up the plot. I like weird. I actually aim for weird, but  I don't think you meant that as a compliment!

Thanks for taking to time to post your thoughts and again I apologize for being absent and clueless.