5iver by KL Martin JR  - Dramedy, Dark - Three seemingly random strangers, connect by a 5 dollar bill, traverse their way through the city to a party will change all their lives. 89 pages - pdf, format

The first page shows that a lot of work is needed:

- No need to number scenes.

Quoted Text INT. MILES'BEDROOM- MORNING We open in a small bedroom covered in various clothes, fast food wrappers and used dishes.

Delete the "we open". Of course we are opening - it is the first scene. Just start with - A small bedroom...

the 2nd action block should not be indented

Quoted Text Miles hops out of bed quickly,perhaps too quickly, as he almost immediately feels the pain and wooziness of his hangover come over him.

How do we know it's a hangover - We don't here. We will in a line or two (empty booze bottle)  - that's good enough. i.e., Show don't tell.

Quoted Text his first step and almost immediately kicks over an array of half empty alcohol bottles while

Two almost immmediately's in two blocks. You don't need them.

Quoted Text ...Miles opens his laptop, sees a picture of himself with his ex girlfriend,winces and immediately

Ex Girlfriend - how would we know? Again - another immediately. Get rid of those.

This might be a good story - but just from page 1 - there is a lot of clean up needed.