Lobrana by George Papadopoulos - Series, Comedy - A guy like Ari Gold from Entourage, is the governor of the 51st state of U.S.A.. 45 pages - pdf, format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

I skimmed through the whole script and holy moly this stuff got some noticeable weight. Reads quite radical and aggressive (not meant negative, rather positive) and I'm actually interested what you've got to say between those lines.

First impression is that you dig in some elemental human abyss of our times without any compromise.

There were some parts where formatting wasn't accurate, like wrong-positioned dialogue boxes and rows of empty lines - such stuff needs to be 100% correct all along.

Whatever, just call me out if you want some exchange.