The Amethyst Star by Richard D Dubose - Sci Fi, Fantasy - A young man is sent on a journey to discover the mysteries within the book of circles after his grandfather is blackmailed by evil witches that believe they will gain immortality. 106 pages - pdf, format

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I thought I would have a look but.... I mean get your front page ready. Come on, that's not a big ask.

And then the first page...

My suggestion would be to do some reading around here. It's a great place to learn and will help tidy up your format and presentation- it's awful to think you gave a good story but then lose your reader

All the best