Banger'z by Bernard Mersier - Drama - Caught between his friends being “Crips” and his sister trying to join the “Bloods” Chris has to make quick life changing decisions before everything goes downhill.  102 pages - pdf format

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Hi - interesting concept, but the action slugs were WAY too long.  I couldn't get past the first few pages.  I guess I'm learning as I'm reading, if you open a script, you're not expecting to read a novella - also can't budget time  w/1 page = 1 minute.  Clean up almost all of your action lines and maybe others will read through?  Keep VO to a very minimal and shorten your dialogue or break it up with banter - but mainly, get ahold of those action lines.  It's very important - esp.  since this would be an action film.  Hope this helps - Gina