The Gospel according to Adam by Bazik Andrey - Drama, Religion - The main character is a horrible person who is very dependent on modern civilization. Someone sends him away into the wild. So he has a long way to find his home and his world. 59 pages - pdf, format

New writer interested in feedback on this work

Bazik:


Bazik: there are many mistakes in the first two pages. e.g.,

Double spacing of all lines

Incorrect Introduction of Characters

Opening Scene with no Scene Heading

Incorrect Formatting of V.Os

Take a look at some scripts to get the proper formatting - it will help

Thank you. I was fixed mistakes. Can you please read it again. I need your oppinion. Sory for my English, my parents from Russia!

Better - but still basic mistakes.

Quoted Text NATURAL AREA - DAY Bird’s eye view. Camera flies over forests and fields, which have no signs of the human existence. Easy listening, beautiful music plays. Day gradually gives way to late evening.

You are missing EXT in your opening scene heading.

Try to avoid camera directions in a spec script

CAP sounds

What you think about story?

Quoted from Bazikav What you think about story?

Didn't get through much of it so really don't have an opinion. As a note, I think you will find that peeps will not give this a full read until you address some of the very basic stuff. I don't mean to be rude, but that's just the nature of the biz. Look at other stuff, learn the basic format, guidelines, etc. and  then worry about the story.