A New Kind of Relationship by O'Shea Wright - Drama, Romance - After going through many problems with many guys, a Caucasian woman meets an African American man, and they begin to fall in love.  But, facing different issues from family members, they'll have a hard time being with a person of another race. 83 pages - pdf, format

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Riddled with problems.

The format is non-standard throughout. Not even close - check out some scripts you'll see the difference.

Quoted Text INT. MARIA'S BATHROOM – LIGHTS ON – NIGHT.

You don't need LIGHTS ON - it is assumed we can see unless you tell us otherwise.

Quoted Text MARIA has just entered in from a night out. She is at her bathroom sink, LOOKING into the mirror with tears in her eyes Okay - she has just entered or she is at the bathroom sink - not both. This needs to be either: Maria enters, heads towards the sink --- or Maria's at the seek, gazing in the mirror. In addition, actions do not needed to be CAPPED - sounds should be.

Quoted Text MARIA (In anger and sadness.) Another one... Another man who can't realize a good woman... Another failed attempt at finding Mr.

You use a ton of parentheticals to describe emotions - let the actors decide this in most cases.

Overall - not ready for primetime - there are some basics missing