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Posted by: Don, June 22nd, 2017, 10:36pm
The Hemp Farm by David E. Foster - Comedy - {no logline} 95 pages - pdf, format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Posted by: eldave1, June 23rd, 2017, 4:31pm; Reply: 1
Sorry - this one is a mess.
Posted by: PrussianMosby, June 23rd, 2017, 7:45pm; Reply: 2
Yo, Dave's right.

I'm not a ";-) user" anymore but your title per se imo is super attractive, especially with regards to that whole renaissance in case of the subject at the moment, with several countries legalizing and finding medical usage etc.

Point is

All that doesn't matter. You must serve a well-thought out selling line/ logline. Then your exact title must stand on the cover page, and then, there's FADE IN: , followed by story and nothing else...

Screenwriting has a definite formatting.

Anyway, as said, the general subject has lots of potential at the moment. So just decide for yourself if you care for a correct and professional presentation.

Best wishes
Posted by: LuisAnthony, June 26th, 2017, 1:01pm; Reply: 3
I agree with the two guys above, screenwriting isn't the place to experiment when it comes to formatting, you either have to get it right or it's not considered a screenplay.

I would also suggest to give us a logline. Scripts without one don't get as many reads.
Posted by: SteveC, August 6th, 2017, 8:29pm; Reply: 4
There doesn't appear to be any punctuation in the dialogue. Perhaps there was a glitch when exporting to PDF?
Posted by: HyperMatt, October 17th, 2017, 6:38am; Reply: 5
It's a good title, but with agree with above comments about the formatting.

At the end of the script you put 'THE END ??' - or maybe that needs to be superimposed.
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