Chance on a Grasshopper by Jo Kolar - Short, Romantic Comedy - A romantic lost in prosaic twenty-first century New York rushes to meet who he believes as the love of his life. However, life manages to trip him up along the way. 10 pages - pdf, format

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Hi Jo,

I went from a "why bother" to a well done.  Saved by the  "bug" , I guess.  Nicely done. Very cute.

I'm an old man, do young NYC apartment dwellers sleep in beads (pg 1). Is it a small apt.?  Is he sweating or just a miss spell?.

Not important I guess.

Anyway,  
Great stuff!!

JJ

Hi JakeJon,

Thanks for reading my script!

Ha, yeah the 'bead' was supposed to be 'bed'. I guess it goes to show you that no matter how many times you read your story, some typos always fall through the cracks. Thanks for catching it!